Walls

You walk away

with a hardened heart

Disgusted with her blank reaction

When this caused you

so much pain

Not a tear is shed

on her end

But you can't help

the moist in your eyes

You think she's unfeeling

When she stares coldly

back at you

But you don't realize

She can't breathe

And she's broken

 

Inside.

Reviews

[Ruth]

Ohh yehhh
This would have serious beat and tone and impact as spoken word hon!
Great work :)
This would have such deliverance!
Hugs
xx

[Robyn]

this reminds me of a break up i had 2 years ago. When i ended the relationship, i didnt let him see how much it hurt me but inside i was dying. he'll probably never know how much pain it caused me and he might even think i never cared.
walls.
great work on a piece i can really relate to

[Adelia Alighieri]

A bold subject. Great write.

[Coyote Poetry]

I knew many woman who had nothing left. I became a friend. We need laughter and a smile sometime. Your description create a lonely woman waiting for nothing. No-one can repair a broken spirit except the person when they are willing to feel alive again. A excellent poem. Description and story was very strong.
Coyote

[Crusaderscross]

This is really good. The emotion are jumping out at the reader. The struggle here is consuming the subject. This is simple yet very deep. Liked it.

[TheOther]

Such a heartbreaking poem, full of pure emotion. That is what I like about it the most. I can relate to this, like many of us can. You've expressed this really well. A nicely penned piece of work.

[Bubo]

Its sounds like me,when I'm hurt I shut off and can be so cold, but its a mask...........this felt very real to me, close to home and you described the emotion perfectly with emotion.

[PasDeChat]

I really like this. I get just like that.. so completely spent.. nothing left but a blank stare. When I get alone, it all comes out.. the tears, rage, screams and beating head against the wall.

[_thesovo]

Oooh. Interesting.... I think I might have to think about this one... All together, very very nice(:

[Kitten]

What was your inspiration for this piece? It's haunting.

I like this, it's my favorite.