Joy of Sin

Poem about how sin grows within us

 

A heart is fragile

It sways like an ocean

Towards

Heaven or Hell

Without ever turning back

 

We fail to understand our sin

Which feeds the heart

Making the undesirable, desirable

 

Humans….

Such fragile creatures

 

A false enlightenment

Blinds the senses

As we forget

The sin lingering on our heart

Sheds thorns on our soul

 

Threatening heart

Threatening mind

 

Decays oneself to the unknown

Thus, is the joy of sin

Author's Note

I wrote this poem to explain that people sin without them wanting to sin. And how one sin creates a chain reaction which results in more sin. Example thievery. If you steal once you will do it again and again. As abstract as it is I hope you enjoy it.

Reviews

[Thanatos Darkraven]

A very well penned (or should I say typed?) work. It's true how fragile we are as people, and how often we sin without wanting to or realizing it. I do have to agree with Arsenic:

"It sways like an ocean
Towards
Heaven or Hell
Without ever turning back"

were my favorite lines out of the poem, simply because of the truth of the words.

[Arsenic]

A extrordinary poem excellently written. I especially like:

"It sways like an ocean
Towards
Heaven or Hell
Without ever turning back"

It is a true statement of the feelings of sin in our time. Rather abstract but still understandable. I am not quite sure however that what you said you were conveying in the authors note is understandable to the reader at all times.

[Lind]

Sin is such a misunderstood concept in these times. We spend a great deal of energy convincing ourselves that it either doesn't exist or that what we are doing does not qualify...

"We fail to understand our sin
Which feeds the heart
Making the undesirable, desirable"

This was very deep and insighful.

[Pj]

What a wonderful write. Yes I agree...especially when one verbally sins through lies, they must lie again to maintain the pretense.
Very truthful of many humans...I guess the point is: embrace the darkness, acknowledge its' existence and try and avoid it.
Nice job!

[Windy]

Admittedly it was a bit hard to understand at first, however after reading it several times and then seeing your authors notes I now see what you mean. It is a bit abstract but I (ended up) liking it! :) Windy

[windmill]

Hm.

I don't really get what you're saying about sin being addictive/chain reactive within this piece. I mean... I see it as a theme, but I wouldn't say that within the piece, you are explaining it. So at the very least, your not is inaccurate. Hardly the least of anybody's worry, so no biggie. I'm just a fiend.

And, uhm... Yep.

I think you said what you set out to say. So mission accomplished.

Woohoo.

[Anonymous]

I like how you took such a simple and not exactly pretty conscept in and of itself and made it beautiful. And I agree with you