One Final Breath

One Final Breath

A Poem by Paloma
"

of sweet poetry

"
There's a poem within me
   refusing to be written,
floating midst sandcastles
   & cotton candy whispers,
it rhymes with affection
    and heartfelt reminisces
 of whimsies caught in cloud
   covers' haunting afflictions

'tween withering wildflowers 
   turned to dithering dust 
    on that fatally tainted day...

 give me one final breath
            of sweet poetry 

© 2016 Paloma



Author's Note

Paloma
Artwork by Januz Miralles

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Convincing poem ; every writer deals with such procrastination.
We think of writing something, but then it's too late ...
"of whimsies caught in cloud
covers' haunting afflictions"
Beautifully written.

Posted 2 Months Ago


A keeper if ever there was, a true little gem.......

Posted 2 Months Ago


this poem leads me to say, it is indeed a "fatally tainted day" when a loved one is gone, lost forever... yet their life and its meaning are always held in "sweet poetry" in our mind and definitely in our heart.. I may have misread your poem Paloma, forgive me, it's where your words led my mind... it is beautifully written Paloma, one I will bookmark and re read often... thank you..

redzone

Posted 1 Year Ago


Very nice, I love reading your writes.They always touch my heart or caress my soul. Thanks, so much for sharing another great piece. Eva

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paloma

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much for your kind words Eva, much appreciated.
There is a magical dreamy feel to this one, Paloma. Loved the alliteration. We all need poetry....it is our addiction. This was beautifully written. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paloma

1 Year Ago

It surely is, thanks for your kind words Lydi.
'tween withering wildflowers

turned to dithering dust

on that fatally tainted day...

(My Fave)




Posted 1 Year Ago


Paloma

1 Year Ago

Thanks, I had wildflowers on the brain.
Dream Weaver

1 Year Ago

nothing wrong with wildflowers on the brain is it? ;)
Ah, the possibilities that those wandering poetic thoughts hold... you have given them great life here.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paloma

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your kind words poetic heroics.
Hello, Paloma! :)
I've read this a few times, a few days ago and today. I think it's great! I've been thinking of a comment to leave. It is my favorite of the poems you have posted.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paloma

1 Year Ago

Very kind of you to say Matt. I'm grateful for your kind words, thank you. :)
There is such a beautiful, haunting darkness in your words. Here is the longing for the poem refusing to be written. You know how deeply this connects to all of us here at the cafe.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paloma

1 Year Ago

I rather thought that some poets could relate. Thanks so much for your kind words.
An enjoyable read, rhyming is gorgeous, this is the sugar diabetics love.

Regards,
Al

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paloma

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your visit and review Alfred, much appreciate your time.

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