One Final Breath

There's a poem within me

   refusing to be written,

floating midst sandcastles

   & cotton candy whispers,

it rhymes with affection

    and heartfelt reminisces

 of whimsies caught in cloud

   covers' haunting afflictions

'tween withering wildflowers 

   turned to dithering dust 

    on that fatally tainted day...

 give me one final breath

            of sweet poetry 

Author's Note

Artwork by Januz Miralles

Reviews

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Convincing poem ; every writer deals with such procrastination.
We think of writing something, but then it's too late ...
"of whimsies caught in cloud
covers' haunting afflictions"
Beautifully written.

[Neville]

A keeper if ever there was, a true little gem.......

[redzone]

this poem leads me to say, it is indeed a "fatally tainted day" when a loved one is gone, lost forever... yet their life and its meaning are always held in "sweet poetry" in our mind and definitely in our heart.. I may have misread your poem Paloma, forgive me, it's where your words led my mind... it is beautifully written Paloma, one I will bookmark and re read often... thank you..

redzone

[EvaThornburn]

Very nice, I love reading your writes.They always touch my heart or caress my soul. Thanks, so much for sharing another great piece. Eva

[1VJ]

Thanks so much for your kind words Eva, much appreciated.

[Lydia Shutter]

There is a magical dreamy feel to this one, Paloma. Loved the alliteration. We all need poetry....it is our addiction. This was beautifully written. Lydi**

[1VJ]

It surely is, thanks for your kind words Lydi.

[Dream Weaver]

'tween withering wildflowers

turned to dithering dust

on that fatally tainted day...

(My Fave)

[1VJ]

Thanks, I had wildflowers on the brain.

[Dream Weaver]

nothing wrong with wildflowers on the brain is it? ;)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Ah, the possibilities that those wandering poetic thoughts hold... you have given them great life here.

[1VJ]

Thanks for your kind words poetic heroics.

[mattavelli]

Hello, Paloma! :)
I've read this a few times, a few days ago and today. I think it's great! I've been thinking of a comment to leave. It is my favorite of the poems you have posted.

[1VJ]

Very kind of you to say Matt. I'm grateful for your kind words, thank you. :)

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a beautiful, haunting darkness in your words. Here is the longing for the poem refusing to be written. You know how deeply this connects to all of us here at the cafe.

[1VJ]

I rather thought that some poets could relate. Thanks so much for your kind words.

[Alfred Kukitz]

An enjoyable read, rhyming is gorgeous, this is the sugar diabetics love.

Regards,
Al

[1VJ]

Thanks for your visit and review Alfred, much appreciate your time.