The Mirror

The Mirror

A Poem by PandaPeaceful

She made me feel
like I was of no
worth.
Like I was a burden
in the mirror. 
She would stare 
at me.
Her big brown eyes-
Shattered by the
world beneath.

Although my breath
fought for her 
consent,
She fled on skin and
bone,
Until the shining scythe,
sliced her brutal
neck.

My eyes condemned the
burning reflection,
as the girl who once
graced the damaged
mirror,
lay empty on
a bed of redness.



© 2018 PandaPeaceful



Author's Note

PandaPeaceful
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I'm up and down on this one. Overall, it's a win. Why? Because I got the idea. Or my version of what the idea was. And there were parts that I liked. Can you tell that there is a "but"coming? (Smile)
I almost felt like you rushed a bit on this one. Big brown eyes... Simplicity, or cliché?
Maybe I think too much, but I'm supposed to give you whatever the piece creates in me, right?

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PandaPeaceful

2 Months Ago

Honest reviews over pity reviews. You're right. (As expected) I'm going to dig deeper and see if I c.. read more



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I'm up and down on this one. Overall, it's a win. Why? Because I got the idea. Or my version of what the idea was. And there were parts that I liked. Can you tell that there is a "but"coming? (Smile)
I almost felt like you rushed a bit on this one. Big brown eyes... Simplicity, or cliché?
Maybe I think too much, but I'm supposed to give you whatever the piece creates in me, right?

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PandaPeaceful

2 Months Ago

Honest reviews over pity reviews. You're right. (As expected) I'm going to dig deeper and see if I c.. read more
Wow! such a strong write here, like this a lot

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PandaPeaceful

3 Months Ago

Thank you!
I really liked your writing style..
And the way you displayed your emotions in this poem is amazing..
Keep writing:)

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PandaPeaceful

3 Months Ago

Thank you! I really appreciate it.
I do like it very much. The mirror is a great metaphor for looking into ourselves but also looking into a mirror does stimulate self contemplation. Your poem is quite simple but a very powerful description of self harm. I particularly liked your images 'shining scythe' and 'bed of redness'. One minor slip - I guess 'a' in line 2 should be 'I'.
Well done for this .
Alan

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PandaPeaceful

3 Months Ago

Thank you for telling me about the error! I am very grateful for your review Alan. I hope you find y.. read more

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Added on January 12, 2018
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