Love Dwells In Dysfunctional Dreams of A World Raining Brass Petals

Song/poem about Love and Insanity personified and vow their love for one another. Mind you, its not a typical one at that ;]

Laughter recedes away
As the monochrome dreams
Plague the ugly, the young and obscene.
Take a moment to breathe
As you open your eyes,
While I carry you
Through a world of our lies.


And I will love you...
I’ll always love you.
Yes, I will love you...
I’ll always love you.

Reverberating voices…
Oh, how they echo off the walls.
And I see you’re still thriving.
The others can’t see
This simple reality—
Though a diabolic nightmare
Stitched so crudely.


Can’t you remember?

At least try to recall…
How water never rained from the ceiling—
Instead brass petals would fall.

Still can’t remember?
Oh, darling, that’s okay
‘Cause I’m here to take you
So very far away.


And I will love you...
I’ll always love you.
Yes, I will love you...
I’ll always love you.

Reverberating voices…
Oh, how they echo off the walls.
And I see you’re still thriving.
The others can’t see
This simple reality—
Though a diabolic nightmare
Stitched so crudely.

 

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Reverberating are voices;

Such lovely echoes bounce off walls.

If silenced, can you still keep thriving?

And though the others can’t see

Such a delicate reality—

This elegant madness

Was made for you and me.

Author's Note

Yes, the title is THAT long. lol

The melody plays well in my head and I can sing it...just wish I knew how to get it right on the piano XD

Anyway, I wrote this a few years back, but didn't like a lot of things, so made changes and whatnot. That last bit I have in italics is suppose to be whispered after the music stops playing--gives the song a creepy vibe, imo...

The line "Reverberating Voices" may be incorrect, but to be honest...I don't care, I just like how it sounds when singing it softly to myself :P

I'm not really in the mood to go into any details to what exactly the song/poem means, so for now use your goddamn imagination XD

Reviews

[Kandace]

I found myself having to re-read some of the lines to actually take in the depth that is portrayed through your words.

'The others can't see
This simple reality-
Though a diabolic nightmare
Stitched so crudely.'

This really stood out to me because of the truth it spoke of, I'm quite fascinated with this poem, wicked awesome job!

[Dino "Camora" Zonetti]

it was nice to read.

[Raven Starhawk]

This was another amazing feast for my eyes to devour. Line after line was a tasty treat that I can savor long after I have finished.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Amazing! I love this! =)

[smalltownsympathies]

Not typical INDEED. It's the ordinary I stay away from. Your voice is true, this poem lyrical and lovely, with such depth that leads me onto several different paths. Can’t you remember?
At least try to recall…
How water never rained from the ceiling—
Instead brass petals would fall.
WONDEROUS. you're beautiful.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

i love this , excellent!!!

[Jean]

I really like this! :D I bet it makes a kick a*s song. :)

[Ama May Cooper]

A lovers almost distress but buried happiness.. this piece has power and freedom like a minds strings gentle unraveling to hold tightly onto those that they want. i loved this sensual piece very well written

[Twilight]

"This elegant madness". This could be a reference, to either the insanity of modern life, or the state of the protagnist's relationship with that special someone in her life?

I accept that no reader, may ever understand all of the meanings in this poem. Clearly, they are rather personal to the writer. Even so, there are lines in this piece, which seem to question the worth of reality? Also, about the loss of love, or how one's search for romance can seem to go on forever?

In the final verse, "such lovely echos bounce off walls". Could these walls represent the protagonist's psychological barriers, or boundaries? Perhaps, the "lovely echos" represent pleasant memories?

Whatever other readers might think, this one certainly provoked some fresh thinking in my mind! Thanks, Angel!

[Destinee]

"This elegant madness was made for you and me" Such a strong ending. I really loved this. Definitely a great write.