The Making of A Nightmare

Surreal poetry in the celebration of nightmares.

In a Mind’s umbra, tattered lights like stars strain

To unveil secrets inky shadows hide in vain;

Guiding lost personas out from monochrome images

Juxtaposing in an unruly manner,

Creating beauty in a selflessly made Nightmare.

 

Sympathetic whispers brush against cold iron walls,

Tattooing the air heavy with flaws;

Steady a wind blows, borne rumors with a sinister nature

Through crippled limbs of stagnating thoughts.

The penumbra stretches over the Mind’s universe

To cover the evidence where defiled dreams rot.

Author's Note

"In a Mind's umbra" & "Tattooing the air" sound nice to me...even if it doesn't make sense, lol

I'll probably go over this again sometime in the future since there's a lot that I don't like. Suggestions are welcomed :]

**Edit**

I changed some things and like how it came out so far :]

Reviews

[Jesse Domingos]

Its full of great imagery. you can eat the words. and see everything you say. Great poem. to me it says or shows that despair or drout of some kind, let it be creativeness or happiness. A cool darkness. great, great stuff. Good work keep writing.

[Another Poet]

Love it! Good one!

[Amduscia]

(G)l(ore)ius piece.

[An owl on the moon]

I love the cryptic keys dangling in front of our eyes... they create such a dark, dreamish state... Each line breathes fresh the nightmarish birth in night's cloak.

[Dewella~Vintella]

Brilliant work. I love the dark elegance that you weaved into each line. The rhythm was wonderful, and I enjoyed your use or word play and flow.

Keep it up.

~Vin

[L0v3craft]

Cheers ^-^

[Anubis]

I know this is going to sound simple but I love the words you use!
Damn fine vocabulary.

I like how your stuff is so... dark.

[L0v3craft]

tehehehe, thank you! I appreciate the review and compliments ;p

[Erika Jones]

This is a wonderful piece. And I liked the words "Tattooing the air" it fits the poem really well :)

[L0v3craft]

-bows-

thanks :)

[Erika Jones]

Always welcome :3

[Polaroid Impossible]

Its interesting, in a way you are celebrating nightmares. Since a child I have suffered night terrors and sometimes even avoid sleep because of it. Therefore I can relate to the permanent distress nightmares bring, "inky shadows", "iron walls", "tattooing".

So dark and eery.. I feel as though I have been cast deep into a Tim Burton film.. Excellent

[L0v3craft]

"Celebrating nightmares."
I really like that, and thank you for the review.

Oh I know how you feel, its been the same for me, but I don't let the fear stop me from being inspired...after all a lot of my best 'dark' pieces have been greatly influenced by my mind-splitting nightmares.

So instead of cringing in terror at the shadows of the Unknown, I embrace the darkness of what my sadistic Subconscious has to offer with a "Bring it on!"-attitude ;P

[Polaroid Impossible]

Great attitude! :)

[Alicia Beavis]

Your diction is just beautiful! And it reads aloud so nicely. Beautiful imagery, too!

[L0v3craft]

heh heh heh, thanks! Though I have changed the tone of the poem, so now when one reads this its imagery is more cyptic and unsettling than beautiful ;p