I Have No Problem

I Have No Problem

I have no problem with the sentiment,

it is substance I desire.

You punish me for your guilt

but I am not impressed.

Merely annoyed

that you play out

such a ballet of deceit

and simply deceive yourself

in such a piteous way.

You punish me for your mortality,

For straying from an angel’s path

and drive a stake of splintered oak

into my soul.

 

17/06/12

 

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a powerful and emotive piece. Pardon me, it is going to take me a while to go through all 40 odd pages of your stuff ...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you KLG. Ah not to worry I have slowed somewhat in recent months but I do appreciate your kindness.

[Lyn Anderson]

I can't believe I missed DECEIVED In this case i before except after c should apply. Shame on me.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha! Eagle eye has landed!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Got it right in the earlier line. Sorted

[Frieda P]

Tough read, speaks volumes.

'You punish me for your guilt
but I am not impressed'

Happens too often in relationships...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Frieda it was a tough ride.

[Leigh]

This does give an in depth insight into a relationship of emotional competitiveness, if that makes sense. It sounds like someone is trying to punish you for their own mistakes, not sure what 'dedcete' is, this is quite complex and personal though.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Leigh. Ha major typo. Funny how easily one looks and does not see!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I could visualise the scene...such sordid drama....and so well written dear John!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Such an accolade coming from you Sheema

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the imagery of the last lines.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Leslie!

[quinfinn]

prima donnas...pah! who needs them? nice write...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

We both agree on that one Quin. Cheers!

[Andorianskye]

i absolutly love this

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Xleana

[DIVYA]

Great psychoanalysis there...
'You punish me for your guilt
You punish me for your mortality,
For straying from an angel’s path'...
A cynical lover comes through perfectly here...
And yes ...he is angry...and hurt ...and bitter too! You have the perfect blend of emoions you desired to convey!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

He was angry and let down badly. Thank you Divya!

[DIVYA]

you are welcome!