Take

Take

Your bitterness portrays

a selfish face of stone.

I beg for love

but empty anger is returned.

I crave solace,

but hear only your demands.

I offer all I have

but you have nothing you will trade.

So is our love foretold

worth anything at all,

or can you only take?

 

04/08/12

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

It is a bitter, sad piece again. Ahh the romantic soul scorned again.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This was from a very difficult period in my life. I was set to move in with my girlfriend and we were talking marriage but when I agreed to move into her life and do things her way she did not even make room in her cottage for me. I had to live out of bags.

[Samuel Dickens]

Perhaps someone's relationship isn't on the best footing. Sounds pretty familiar to me. Excellent writing, John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sam. You are of course right and as I end my seventh volume of poetry and a relationship I move to the eighth-New Orbit.

[Sheila Kline]

It is difficult to be in a relationship when one partner does the giving and the other only knows how to take. You have been to express this sentiment with a clear explanation........."I offer all I have but you have nothing you will trade".....pretty much sums it up! Your free form verse has a powerful message!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Sheila. I guess raw emotion fuels our writing!