Sun and Beer and Poetry

Sun, Beer and Poetry

I gave up

offering you salvation

from the wreck

of your disaster.

I begged you

to come into my life raft

but you hung desperately

to your flotsam

with the fear and fervour

of paralysis.

You could not be bothered!

So now I concentrate

on being alone and free

with sun and beer and poetry.

 

18/08/12

 

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

great title to a great poem....Been there.....thanks for reminding me

[John McFadyen]

Sorry!!

[Dr. Wood ?]

no...not at all, I was not complaining...Distant memory for me....I can smile now

[John McFadyen]

Oh ok that is good.

[MOON]

Poignant throwing a life line and being rejected , best way is through the lonliness. Lovely write.

[John McFadyen]

Many thanks

[MOON]

Oh dear , meant write through the lonliness.

[John McFadyen]

So many words to tell, so little time to do, I really miss the swell, and wish she had been true!

[MOON]

see already a poem there !

[MELODY CARNEY aka Kimbe..]

I loved this! How true it is of all the times we all try to save a friend, then we realize they are a home in there misery. Sun, Beer and Poetry...what a perfect combination!

[John McFadyen]

Hi Melody, Glad you enjoyed it and can relate to it. Many thanks.

[Lily Mae]

My favorite place to be..the beach with beer and making poetry... ;) x

[Freedom's Child]

Good piece with a great ending. I like the imagery you use except I would maybe go a different way than life raft, only because it has been use so often, maybe something like I begged you to release your anchor and hoist my mainsail; but that's just me. Good work!

[John McFadyen]

Ok Point taken but as a non sailor such metaphors are lost on me.

[David Lewis Paget]

That's a familiar scenario. You just have to pick yourself up and jump back into the water... I did; four wives, seven kids, 23 grandchildren and almost two Greats and counting... It's a great life if you don't weaken! (Saturday Night and Sunday Morning - Alan Sillitoe).

[John McFadyen]

No I agree David. I am almost matching your record not in kids and as yet no grandkids! But what material for our writing eh?

[Soulfulbubbles]

great write


alone but not lonely

[John McFadyen]

Thank Soulful. Perhaps a litte lonely but for the first time in my life learning to do for ME.