Avoiding Damnation

Avoiding Damnation

You stole fragments of my soul

as I slept in trust and hope

in your unmade bed of lies.

You deftly swept the pieces

under your carpet of deceit

where I could not reach them.

I fell so easily,

black widow’s prey,

into your spun web of delusions,

where you tried to ensnare me.

A child of love

who holds no gods,

but I swear I heard an angel's cry.

A crystal melody of truth,

begging me to flee,

urging my escape from

the burning gates of hell.

 

27/01/13

Reviews

[Andorianskye]

This gives me a strange feeling not a bad one but an odd one

[A. H. Pinley]

But sometime we're so blinded that we march right in when later we're left asking ourselves, "How did I get here?'

[John Alexander McFadyen]

True AHP, true!

[s y e]

Omfg, you had to RR me a poem with spiders?! Are you nuts?! I hate spiders so much, they creep me out! Ewwww, they're horrible!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

So sorry NH so please don't read Cunning Fate http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Passion8/1008941/

[s y e]

Oh God, another spider one huh? You meanie :P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

On my knees before you.

[s y e]

Ha! I forgive you

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Now do not be too hasty my lady. A sinner has penance to pay!

[s y e]

Haha, my apologies kind sir! ;-P

[LJW]

If I could stop obsessing about God I might start to live.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes that is so true. For us Catholics who are taught we are sinners it is hard!

[Junert]

Black widows. Those spiders are facinating.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

And scary! Lol

[Junert]

Yeah. Scary.

[KAOlmsted]

Run John run! Great imagery. Love it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I did and got away slightly charred but not charred lol!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

quite scary imagery, i was egging you on to escape as soon as possible........

[Leslie Philibert]

Another good poem, like the expression unmade bed of lies, made me think of the art object at the Tate Modern from Tracy ( something) - a good poem here.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Tracy Emin. Thank you Leslie

[Claire Twinn]

Lucky you had your running shoes on! I'd love to hear that crystal melody of truth too sometimes.
I think it should be angel not angels.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Angel's. Yes I had just acquired the running shoes.

[creativequill]

a child of love
who holds no gods
but i swear i heard an angels cry

that particular part just draws me in, the entire thing is great, full of pain and heartache from deception, but something about those three lines just impact sadness right home, this was a gripping piece, i hung on every single word, and then read it again :)