Life's a B***h

Experimental!

Life's a B***h

Thriller in the chiller

with a killer punch,

taking on the cowboys,

guess I'm out to lunch.

Holed beneath the water

line, looks like I'm sunk,

that is what you get

if you get me drunk.

I danced the night away

with a red hot chick,

she said she liked me too

so I kissed her quick.

Shotgun at the wedding,

guess I failed to duck,

but that's just what happens

when you're out of luck.

Learning lessons daily,

not so good at maths,

going round in circles

but on the wrong paths.

 

12/06/17

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we've all had those moments of circling on the wrong path.

Love the shot gun wedding line has a little humor in it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

indeed was a tongue in cheek piece. Many thanks PB will reciprocate on my return from holidays.

[DIVYA]

Yet we keep learning from mistakes....One day wisdom will surely prevail. Loved to read a rhyming poem from you John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

If we learn its not so bad. Many thanks Divya

[Teddybearlee]

Very quick, very witty, very..ditty? Lol, thoroughly enjoyed it. I agree with those mention it in terms of lyrics, kind of reminds me of Aerosmith. Enjoying reading your works Mr. McFadyen!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you kindly dear sir!

[bluessadmood]

Yes life could get really tough..times whatever you do..as hard as you go..so much effort and a lifetime struggling ,suddenly you look back and just see what a mess..let wonder at some saying ,life is easy and beautiful..I must be like a totally different bread...or seams like this life was never made for me..ha ha
Lovely write

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank yous BSM. Life always has a silver bit to it and often gold where you least expect it.

[bluessadmood]

Yes maybe,ha ha

[DIVYA]

You are welcome John.

[Gee]

"Up the junction" by Squeeze would be a good accompaniment for this. Lyrics I think they could have written, and boy were they good, as is this John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Loved Squeeze and 'Up the Junction' was a favourite. Many thanks Gee.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

A bit of jumping around from topic to topic here--maybe add some breaks between them in the structure of the poem...?
It does fit your title quite well!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I( guess the jumping around is down to interpretation. It's about a guy who goes out drinking with his mates, meets a girl, gets her pregnant but regrets being with her. Thanks for commenting.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it's sort of like that...everything falls into place, or better yet, is shot into place.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed Jacob, many thanks.

[duff]

I like how you threw a curve ball with this. You should experiment more often because it's catchy and has a nice flow to it. Stepping outside the box and it's working. Good stuff man.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Cheers duff!

[duff]

Haha, love this! Can't go wrong with that title

[Enchanted-Raven]

Nicely done...enjoyed :) x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you ER.

[andrew mitchell]

a fun poem john almost a rappers limerick but entertaining all the same in a rhythmic format .

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Andrew.