Love at a Fast Pace

If death is more certain than love, is it not time to fall?

Love at a Fast Pace

I looked into her eyes;

it left me breathless,

stunned,

unable to breathe

just for an instant.

A thrill shot through me

like an electric shock

and she had my attention.

I was transfixed,

nailed to the cross.

Locked-in syndrome

ruled my being.

I was in the hands

of fate.

I hung,

suspended in hot aspic,

warm stirrings

filling my loins.

I felt exposed,

ashamed,

helpless and lost.

But this, this

was a place of peace

where I would

gladly close my eyes

forever.

 

13/10/17

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i was a stumbling bumbling teen there in your opening lines my friend ;} love this:
"I hung,
suspended in hot aspic,"
the fire lights ...we are hooked .. hesitancy dissipates ..its that moments peace tho isn't it...that transcends ... offers something more than that flash in the pan moment ..pity we can't stay there :( strong story telling John .. the scene is set with room for "filling in" .. read it out loud .. easy to follow its rhythm .. lots of conflict ... of emotions and perhaps beliefs
E.

[emmajoy]

Seems the power of the unknown gathers momentum, sings and hums, then.. becomes a place of safety.. calm.. perhaps more desirable than the raw heat of diving into scalding water!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed more appealing than scalding water my Lady. Many thanks.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked how you described the places and the moment. You made the reader understand the emotion felt. Thank you John for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome John.

[Susan 🦋]

I'm quite new to Free verse...but not too emotions! ..WOW Raw, sweet and tender sensations melting from this piece.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Susan that was what I had hoped for!

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW, the flow of this one is fantastic, John! The urgency of new love, the attraction, the desire....it's all so powerful. Yes, anyone could be lost there forever. Wonderful. Lydi**

[Angie G]

I really enjoy your style of writing and you engage the reader. Happy writing my friend.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Angie, I appreciate it.