Paint Me As I Am

a poem

Paint me as I am
All the imperfections
Do you see them?
I mean, really, they are quite obvious
so paint them a shade of
grey

Paint me as I am all the consellations

I was runner up in the game of life

Never the winner

So paint them a hue of

if I only knew


Paint me as I am
Silliness
shyness
The shyness may not show so well
still
it's there
As for the silliness
it shines right through
So paint them a hue of
blue

Paint me as I am

All the love inside

I gave it away

You took it for granted

Sucked it up

Now I'm a half empty cup

Paint them a color of

sorrow

One you may have to borrow

if

It's not in your pallette


Paint me as I am
All the passion
joy
The happiness
once so apparent
Paint them a shade that is
transparent

Paint me as I am

The

sadness

insecurities

regerts

remorse

the losses

they hurt so hard

so paint them the

deepest hue of blackish blue


Paint me as I am
A heart as big as the Texas sky
Yet as empty as yesterdays coffee cup
Paint my heart many colors
but the crack
paint it the same shade of
if I only knew

My heart paint it

red

pink

purple

indigo

because it was once

alive

vibrant


Paint me as I am
Paint me like me
Tell me, what do you see






 

Author's Note

This is a poem i wrote about five years ago .. i was depressed.. it does not look like the original which had some colored text and a different format.. too bad

Reviews

[Bubo]

Fabulous
love the layout and comparisons
to your heart and all the hurt inside......

We tend to see so many emotions in
colours but always the heart red and
our moods many different ones.........
its amazing when we think that colours
represent so much in our hearts.

Very sad piece though.

[Jazmine Night]

I love the layout and the flow itself. Great read. Wonderful work Chloe! :)

[Bernie Shelton]

I have got to tell you that I think this is one of the best of yours that I have had the pleasure of reading, a tremendous write Chloe, bravo to you on this.

[James K. Blaylock]

i really enjoyed reading this. the heart can take so much trama thru-out our lives. and wondrously it never stops it's beat until it's truest time...a stong as flesh allows, rainbow muscle.

Paint me as I am
A heart as big as the Texas sky
Yet as empty as yesterdays coffee cup
Paint my heart many colors
but the crack
paint it the same shade of
if I only knew

keep up the great writes.

[Joseph - Michael]

Hmm, very interesting concepts of the color for an imagination along with the feeling. For some strange reasons, it reminded me of this old flick, "What Dreams May Come" (with Robin Williams) Can I assume that it inspired you to write it and mixing it all up with your personal emotions? If not, it's still really great...

[Blackbirdsong]

I see a beautiful rainbow. The layout of this poem is wonderful too, as well as using the colored words throughout. You wrote this and then expressed it visually. Pretty amazing and an amazing job.

So....when you gonna try to get it published?

:)

[Jasmina Amethyst Pendra..]

Brilliant, simply brilliant. I love how you take various colors one by one and describe where they should be painted. The visual layout of this poem keeps your attention. I normally find it distracting but this was great and inspiring. Wow. i wish I could pick some favorite lines but I love it all. ~Liv

[Dave "Doc" Rogers]

I like what you did with the shape and flow of this one. The visual layout is nice and keeps the eyes involved. Yes, it is a bit melancholy, but those days happen to us. It reads like a letter and a cry for respect/meaning/purpose from someone special and close. I get a sense of loss, rejection, looking for affection and purpose, affirmation.

This is good stuff. I can see this in printed form using pictures in color washes to describe the different colors of emotion/state.

Thank you for sharing this.

Doc.

technical:

stanza 2, line 4: "piant" to "paint"

[Amy Lou]

Wow Chloe,
What a lovely, sensitive piece.
How creative and full of light.

I simply lack the words to describe
something so beautiful, and I am so
glad you shared this with me!

Absolutely gorgeous visuals!
{{hugs}}
Amy Lou

[Yira Simone]

Wow...this was just beauitful! I loved this and feel you really hit this out of the ball park when you wrote this. Such perfect imagery and flow...I am just in awe. All I can say you really conveyed the message of take you as you are and not to try and change you, not even the flaws...especially the flaws, they are what sets us apart and who we are. This was some damn good writing!!!-Catrina

[Nathan Strange]

Hey this is brilliant, I love the colourful imagery and the way you've set it out!
Anyway I liked this it was more about seeing yourself for who you really are and deluding yourself. Asking someone to see you for who you really are.
I see people for who they are and I take their personal defects and fabricate them making them in to a caricature!

Just read fabian's review lol, very good as well!