Paint Me As I Am

Paint Me As I Am

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe
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a poem

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Paint me as I am
All the imperfections
Do you see them?
I mean, really, they are quite obvious
so paint them a shade of
grey

Paint me as I am all the consellations

I was runner up in the game of life

Never the winner

So paint them a hue of

if I only knew


Paint me as I am
Silliness
shyness
The shyness may not show so well
still
it's there
As for the silliness
it shines right through
So paint them a hue of
blue

Paint me as I am

All the love inside

I gave it away

You took it for granted

Sucked it up

Now I'm a half empty cup

Paint them a color of

sorrow

One you may have to borrow

if

It's not in your pallette


Paint me as I am
All the passion
joy
The happiness
once so apparent
Paint them a shade that is
transparent

Paint me as I am

The

sadness

insecurities

regerts

remorse

the losses

they hurt so hard

so paint them the

deepest hue of blackish blue


Paint me as I am
A heart as big as the Texas sky
Yet as empty as yesterdays coffee cup
Paint my heart many colors
but the crack
paint it the same shade of
if I only knew

My heart paint it

red

pink

purple

indigo

because it was once

alive

vibrant


Paint me as I am
Paint me like me
Tell me, what do you see






 

© 2008 Chloe..Across the Universe


Author's Note

Chloe..Across the Universe
This is a poem i wrote about five years ago .. i was depressed.. it does not look like the original which had some colored text and a different format.. too bad

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Fabulous
love the layout and comparisons
to your heart and all the hurt inside......

We tend to see so many emotions in
colours but always the heart red and
our moods many different ones.........
its amazing when we think that colours
represent so much in our hearts.

Very sad piece though.

Posted 16 Years Ago


24 of 24 people found this review constructive.




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How introspective and intelligently written. You have a new fan.

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

absolutely love it. period.

two of my favorite writing topics are water and colors. so many emotions float to the surface when reading this. i'm going to be placing this in my library and sending it on to a couple of friends.

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

I know nothing of Chloe except this poem, having come new to the playing field. I know brilliance when I see it.

"Paint my heart many colors
but the crack
paint it the same shade of
if I only knew"

I know this shade Chloe, I think I invented it. So in what way is this not your usual self? Amazing flow, adherence to central idea, shape is wonderful, never completely down...not with its playfulness.


Posted 16 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

I liked the layout that you chose for the poem. The way it shifted back and forth seemed to almost give it two voices.
"Paint them a color of
sorrow
One you may have to borrow
if
It's not in your pallette"

I think that was my favorite line. I liked the rhythm of it. Why is it though that the happiness is the only thing lacking in color? Should happiness be so transparent?

Posted 16 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

Talented usage of hues.
The vibrant colors return, can only return with such depth of insight.
An emotional bank account that has overspent, in need of replenishment, to fill that Texas size heart..
A texas size write....

Posted 16 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

The voice of the blues..

Such a beautiful poetic verse here, the vibrant colors, a different way to see thru sadness... i adore the way you crafted this poem together with the different colors and then how and where the words are placed on the page... brilliant hon.

Faerie Blessings!

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.

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BjH
everybody has already said so much
but i just had to say this is excellent

bjh

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 8 people found this review constructive.

something otherworldly about this.. an underlying sadness.. a yearning underneath the page its been written on.. struggling with one's self... struggling with mirrors and all that comes with them... you feel like there's no room for change, to grow as a human being... its like being caught in a black void trap.. you've been hurt.. and it feel like a serated bee sting.. it hurts.. but it hurts to much to pull out..

Posted 16 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.

excellent flow and love the play with the layout well done.

Posted 16 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.

All the colors of the rainbow blended together to make up a whole - a beautiful poem and a beautiful person. This is really amazing and i really love it - the layout, the color choices, the words all blend into pure beauty. This is very beautiful and special and is prolly my fav piece of yours so far. I would love to finger paint all over you - i mean to paint you as i see you in my minds eye.

Posted 16 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.


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Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR



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Sometimes i feel like an alien in a strange land..can you relate? I love people and friends are just that to me , friends-if you request me as a friend it would be nice if you read something I have .. more..

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