gone in seconds flat!

gone in seconds flat!

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

Here today
gone tomorrw
seems the way we roll r0und here

Writings deleted
Damn, I feel cheated
they were filled with
my 
blood 
sweat and tears

tho some got jeers ( i admit)

I'll never have the same recipe again
I will forget to add something 
they will not be the same

Oh, well
here today
gone tomorrow
that's how we roll
round here

Bye bye writings
sorry to see you go
miss you!
Silly mindless ramblings
pieces of heart and soul

Sad to see you go.....

© 2008 Chloe..Across the Universe


Author's Note

Chloe..Across the Universe
Silliness.. to keep from crying ..lol

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Aww Chloe, I hope you didn't loose them all. I feel so sad for those who did. Luckily mine was all safely backed up but I know I wouldn't have taken it so good if it wasn't
My thoughts are with the guys who did, 'cause our words are like part of our soul by losing them so many lost a part of who they are and you are so right even if you tried they would never come out the same again if you tried to rewrite them

Posted 16 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.




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I have been perusing your poems and some of them are really good! This one is an example. You have a great flow, simple format, and much gravity. There are not many things that cause more of that blank empty feeling than deleting a four hour work by accident, forever lost.
But, thats the way we roll round here.
Good stuff.

Posted 15 Years Ago


chloe, without being too overboard, i have to say, you have an awsome flow, and it really captures
my thoughts every time i read your work, its exactly what poetry should be, as this piece here,
a reflection of the heart, in perfect shade, the meaning, i can certainly relate to what you are saying,
sad because if i become attached to a writing and its suddenly gone, its like losing a friend, and writings
like your's, a treasure indeed, especially for people like me who thrive on passions, as food for thought,
which is what defines the main substance of poetry in my opinion, very nicely done, heartbreaking

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Cloe - Hadn't been here very long but had a lot posted - have lost some - a couple fairly special - so I too know how you feel and your poem , Gone In Seconds Flat" conveys that extremely well.

On the sad possiblity something like this may happen again - God willing it never does, perhaps when we do a review, we should make mention of the title, or at least some part of the poem or story, that makes it identifiable, rather than simply saying - that's nice etc.

Just a thought.

I guess we need to remember that sometimes poems and stories can be a bit like a curry, they can be better after a re-heat or re-write - the recepie may not be the same but the ingredients are and the words are all in your head, you just gotta get em out!

And I love the positive twist you put on this -

Well Done !!!!

Jen - JG







Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

thats really sad when you lose something dear to you like that but at least you were able to channel that loss into making an excellent poem so thats something not much by comparison with what you have lost but its better than nothing at all least thats my opinion for whatever its work very very good poem though

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The thing that really annoyed me, was not loosing my writings (they were backed up on a hard drive), but having my library saves disappear; some of which were yours.

Those I do miss! I'm glad to see your still rambling here!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Lex
Abso f*****g lutely, echoes my sentiments completely.

Posted 16 Years Ago


I'm so sorry Chloe. Your poem really portrays how you feel in a softer way. You get your anger out but you have so much patience...I can tell! Anyone else would have been using harsher words for going through far less. I give you so much credit for letting your special spirit shine through this terrible time! You are quite a lady!

Posted 16 Years Ago


Aw, poor Chloe! I am really sorry about your loss. At least, it inspired a cool poem. ;) That is little consolation. Thanks for your prayer for those who lost out in a different fashion.

-Gabe


Posted 16 Years Ago


Nice work...I completely understand where you're coming from! Suggestion: perhaps, when you say "my blood sweat and tears" you could make each word an individual line (my/blood/sweat/and/tears) because then (I think) it would have more of an impact in emphasizing how hard you work. Keep writing!

Posted 16 Years Ago



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