Chasing

I was chasing you
like a long lost dream
so silly of me
as if i should chase you

I was keeping up
until the polka-dots blew off
my dress
I stopped to gather them
fell behind

I was on your heels
like the hounds of hell
like a woman gone mad
chasing you

so silly of me to chase you
as if i should chase you

I almost caught you
rain came and drained me dry
i fell behind
just a bit behind

so silly of me to chase you
as if i should chase you
you’re always one step behind

Author's Note

i just decided to see what came out as i set here.. this was/is it
strange and befuddled..

The picture is of our snow we finally got two weeks ago ! :)
So pretty

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

Oh my gosh....I absolutely LOVE this piece! I picked out this as a favorite part:
I was keeping up
unitl the polka-dots blew off
my dress
I stopped to gather them
fell behind
It's so genius....I can actually see you stopping to pick up all your polka dots...how fun and original. The ending also blew me away....a brilliant twist. The whole piece is just fabulous, if you ask me. Good write!!

[Jason]

lOL, i love this one! you have a way of making me think about what your writing means ,that what i love about it! Leave more to be determined by the reader.

[shadadakiya]

So sweet,i can relate to this,heheh i love it (:

[Glee]

Touching story. Sounds a bit cold though. Like someone was a somewhat disappointing. Failing to keep up with the speed. May be you should slow down instead.

[thecoolone52]

Nice write... different compared to your usual pieces... your a versatitle write and can switch up your style when you find the need to do that.......... anyway tubular write Hope everything is well

[Blackbirdsong]

This is really a wonderful poem Chloe...keep writing like this, seriously....off to put this in my favorites for sure.

I love the image of chasing you use throughout...there is a wonderful poetic playfulness to this that is pure pleasure to read.

[*** Hey Jude***]

Wow Chloe the more I read your writing the further I totally adore your work. This piece speaks with strength and feelings of fervor that many of us can relate to so well. I adore you and your work S.I.S.! ~Jude xo
PS I hope you and Donovan had a great time in the snow

[An Ordinary Woman]

This is truly a wonderful piece, Chloe. It has a hint of regret and it's full of the kind of passion a woman feels when shes in love! VERY clever, too. :+) *winks

You did a fantastic job with this, way to go!

[Jd Young]

The imagery in this poem is beautiful. this cafe has changed immensely. Everyone has this newfound originality. The last five pieces i have read have gone in my favorites and now this one is too. The way you capture the love of the snow and love of anything really.

Chloe. You never cease to amaze me. Thank Yo for this brilliant piece. Damn, writerscafe has gotten really good.

[jesthepoet]

I really loved this poem! Brilliant!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Loved this, Chloe. The best stanza, was the second one. Clever and genius.


Great Write.