Journey to Beauty

a short- short

Walking alone late night searching for peace and sanctimony. The moonlight shines down upon me bathing me in it's beauty. Moon glow surrounds me.
Within the shadows I hear a noise...a voice calling for me. I recognize the voice I have been trying to escape. I don't want you near, I don't want you here.
Yet there you are with blood-red eyes. I cannot turn my head, can't break the gaze. As if in a trance I walk to you. Your ice cold lips burn hell's fire.
You smell of a funeral pyre. Your thin white hands aglow in the moon's light feels like artic wind on my hot skin.
Too close, you are too close. I cannot break the gaze.

As your sharp white fangs of teeth sink deep within my skin, for moment I feel such dread. My heart quickens, my breathing ceases. I hear the beating of our hearts inside my head. Loud, so loud they beat in time like a marching band. God how beautiful. I hear the leaves rustling in the trees , see the stars in the blue-black sky magnified a million times. I hear insects as they scurry across the damp, dank earth. The sound of voices from far away, speaking languages I am just learning echo inside my head.
It feels as if I am just beginning to live. My eyes see clearer than ever before across vast lands and terrains. I see your beautiful face. I know my fate. "Forgive me
Oh, God, I have fallen from your grace."

Author's Note

many vampire movies on late night tv..
writers blockage

Reviews

[NoNameChris]

Oh man, I love vampires :D. This reminds me of Anne rice's work. You should continue this into a full short story!

[Dragon]

Cool. I seriously like this one but I'm not a fan of poetry. It comes to me that you are trying to make a story but it is shortening to a poem. no offense.

[Quinn Blackburn]

Wonderfully descriptive, I kept thinking of a rabbit in that hypnotic panic before the gaze of a snake. I wonder what passes through their minds as they surrender to their predator? Direct, vivid, captivating... an excellent wordcrafting!

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now thats a beautiful piece of prose..capturing the moment of turning and the ending..nice

[SpokenWord]

Vampires are always so romantic and still deadly as they seperate our souls from God. I like the ending it is like a huge wake up call from the special affects of being bitten. Still very romantic! Great write.

[Rossen]

I was seduced into this place of rustling leaves and echos of the mind

My heart quickened under the blue-black sky
Moon glow surrounds me ...will I ever die

[Ladysue]

wow this was very well written. Wonderful imagery. I was draw in from the beginning and compelled to read on. This was fantastic story telling. Much enjoyed..

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

Good read Chloe, but are you looking for sactuary or sanctimony? If it is the latter, we only have to look around us to find plenty of it!lol

I have always hated horror, but I did feel your words getting under my skin. I think it was in the first paragraph, which is a good sign that I'm hooked on the story.

Smiling at you

Tai