Crawl to Me

Crawl to Me

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

Come to me baby
down on your knees
oh baby I love it when you crawl

Crawl to me
oh, baby , baby

Watch me as I sway
just for you baby , only you
dripping honey you make me

Wanna go down , oh baby
just can't leave you now

Watch me as I sway
oh baby we got all day
make me wanna stay

Honey , sweet
no way am I walkin' out that door

Crawl to me
oh baby , crawl
you make me wanna stay

Oh baby we can play all day
games no one else would play

Come to me baby
come to me now
oh baby baby you make me

Wanna crawl
I wanna crawl to you, just you

Crawl to me baby
let the honey drip
oh sweet baby taste it on your lips

Crawl oh baby, baby crawl
Scream it, scream it out loud

Baby baby you you you
crawl to me make my honey drip
sway with me baby , stay with me baby

Crawl , crawl, crawl on your
knees to me -to me- to me
oh baby love keeps flowin '

Love you baby baby baby
oh baby, you, you, you
make me wanna

© 2011 Chloe..Across the Universe

Author's Note

Chloe..Across the Universe
Well now - you may wonder what this is all about and you may say this is one suck ass poem - actually it is lyrics or poem inspired by Led Zepplin's song 'You Make Wanna Crawl"- I think i wrote this wrong for the contest .. said write how it makes you feel .. i don't know about this ... is it an embarrassment? Truthful opinions - i can take it on the chin
If you know it or listen it is so so so sexy - voice and guitar makes you wanna crawl lol
I ain't no song writer .. my shot for the contest -anything with music i'm in ..

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Hmm, for me personally, there are far too many baby's in this and too much repetition. Perhaps if there was a song attached to it I might feel differently. As far as the inspiration for this, It's called "I'm gonna crawl" not 'you make me wanna crawl.' There are some familiar phrases or words through-out from old blues tunes. I grew up on Zeppelin and was shocked to see so much plagiarism in their lyrics and guitar riffs. They're still one of the best bands though.

Posted 5 Years Ago

From the start, since it was inspired by music, I was drawn to it. Lol. I think music is one of the best sources for inspiration and even motivation. I write a lot of poems either using parts of songs as a starter point or just whatever comes to mind when I hear the lyrics. I love that it was inspired by Led Zeppelin. Zeppelin is a classic. They were a very influential band that inspired so many others artists to do great things and still to this day inspire people, as I've seen here. Lol.
The lyrics in music alone can get you thinking. And the emotions/feelings/body-highs I get from the instrumentals are almost impossible to describe, but it motivates me to keep trying.
This piece was very interesting to me. Seductive, romantic, passionate, and bold without being too over the top.
I really like how at the beginning of the poem it kind of sounds sweet and romantic, like:
"Watch me as I sway, just for you baby" and "Honey, sweet, no way am I walkin' out that door"
Then towards the end, it gets more bold and intense. Lines like:
"Oh sweet baby taste it on your lips" and "Scream it, scream it out loud"
Those are powerful words there, used in a powerful context. :P Lines like that can really strike some people at their core.
As for being an embarrassment, if you're confident about your work and you enjoy it, then it shouldn't be embarrassing. The fact that you're willing to share your work and be open to criticism says good things.
I say keep up the good work. :)

One last thing... Even If you think a poem you wrote sounds silly or you're unsure about it, remember that you wrote it with whatever feelings you were having. Something triggered those words... Embrace those feelings, understand them, and let them loose. ;)

Posted 5 Years Ago

Love,Love,Love this!! nice work :D

Posted 5 Years Ago

So seductive and implicitly erotic.

Posted 5 Years Ago

Man this made me wanna crawl. I don't know how else to say it. Well done!

Posted 5 Years Ago

ya did good...makes me wanna crawl ;)

Posted 5 Years Ago

Actually this is a pretty good take on a very underrated song...I could easily picture Plant singing these words^^

Posted 5 Years Ago

With the right gentle rhythm and a smoky melody, these lyrics would be perfect :)

Posted 6 Years Ago

All I can say, is baby, baby, oh baby!

Posted 6 Years Ago

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Added on May 25, 2011
Last Updated on May 25, 2011


Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR

Sometimes i feel like an alien in a strange land..can you relate? I love people and friends are just that to me , friends-if you request me as a friend it would be nice if you read something I have .. more..