Until Friday

Until Friday

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

It is only till Friday I say
Count the days
1-2-3-4-5-
His voice like an angel

Don't cry, I say
I will call every day
It hurts to speak
My trembling voice

Ring, ring, ring
Hello, yes, he is ready
Will be there shortly
His smug voice

Daddy's on his way
His eyes look into mine
I see the tears
His sea- blue eyes

His hand in mine
We walk outside
He watches each passing car
His sad boy eyes

There he is , I say
I feel his hand tighten
1-2-3-4-5-
His little boy voice

I love you, I say
I love you too
Five days?
His voice echoes

Five days, I say as they drive away


© 2012 Chloe..Across the Universe



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I really enjoyed this

Posted 4 Years Ago


Enjoyed this - you told just enough here to hook the reader. I can feel the wistfulness in the speaker of "I love you..."

Posted 4 Years Ago


ENJOYED IT ALOT! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Really enjoyed this!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Although I don't have really much of an idea as to what's going on you can hear the raw emotion through your words which is really good. Curious, what's the storyline?

Posted 4 Years Ago


Fleeting moments of closeness captured polaroid style and held closely til they pass once again.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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This has really great visuals in it and really tells a story! Great job! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


I am curious?? This flowed nice. Everything you write vibrates perspective...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


A very nice poem
Like the way it's divided and how it all flows nicely
Keep up the good work :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


To share love is a pain.. knowing that it is love you share...is your gain. Well penned.

Posted 5 Years Ago



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Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR



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Sometimes i feel like an alien in a strange land..can you relate? I love people and friends are just that to me , friends-if you request me as a friend it would be nice if you read something I have .. more..

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