Until Friday

Until Friday

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

It is only till Friday I say
Count the days
His voice like an angel

Don't cry, I say
I will call every day
It hurts to speak
My trembling voice

Ring, ring, ring
Hello, yes, he is ready
Will be there shortly
His smug voice

Daddy's on his way
His eyes look into mine
I see the tears
His sea- blue eyes

His hand in mine
We walk outside
He watches each passing car
His sad boy eyes

There he is , I say
I feel his hand tighten
His little boy voice

I love you, I say
I love you too
Five days?
His voice echoes

Five days, I say as they drive away

© 2012 Chloe..Across the Universe

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Thixs sounds like a broken family and the father only getting to see his child on the week end..Sad but often true in the society we live in today..Deeply thoughts arise from this work..Vazlentine

Posted 6 Years Ago

Great write. Easy and emotional read.

Posted 6 Years Ago

I like this a lot. It has a perfect bitter sweet tone to it

Posted 6 Years Ago

Good write.

Posted 6 Years Ago

There is a rather sad, touching, subtle unspoken backdrop underpinning this glimpse of a life. As much as what is said as is unsaid has equal sensitivity and impact here, in a poem told with a simplicity and gentleness that evokes strong feeling. A picture is built up in this way which reverberates in the tenderness of a situation.

So much can be said of broken relationships and families, but the sparing way this is executed has as much power and tragic charm as anything anyone could say. This is heartfelt, sincere; and is empowered by its simple unprejudiced truth.

Posted 6 Years Ago

Oh wow I totally love this write,
You are very poetic with your words.
I like the vivid imagery i got, It was a sad imagery.
Very well written Chloe

Posted 6 Years Ago

this was good i love it

Posted 6 Years Ago

beautiful and moving, well done

Posted 6 Years Ago

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Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR

Sometimes i feel like an alien in a strange land..can you relate? I love people and friends are just that to me , friends-if you request me as a friend it would be nice if you read something I have .. more..


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