Ouija Vu

Ouija Vu

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

I hit the ground running
Feet flat on the clouds
As fast as Mercury
With broken wings
Light as an elephant
Heavy as a feather
Where's the ouija board
Deja vu
Deja vu
Day- light view
Not needed whispered
Purple dragonfly dressed in rags
Not needed butterfly
Dressed in silk hummed
Cloud-light shining brightly in my eyes
Blinding me
Seeing eye dog ahead
On a one-dollar bill
Follow me he said
A message I have
Ouija board ?
Deja vu
You swallowed the ouija board
Message inside you said
The viole(n)t-eyed cat with two tails
Soft as quills
Mercurious  sent me
Skimming the earth
Message inside
For better
Or worse
First or last
Now or later
Forever
Until the next
Deja vu
Deja vu
Orange light flashes
Shivering neon
Message must wait
Today's not the day

© 2012 Chloe..Across the Universe



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one of your best. good to read you again. the short clipped lines create a sense of urgency and a fleeting passion that is very effective. Well done!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chloe..Across the Universe

4 Years Ago

Hello Lydia is so good to see you thank you so much for your very generous and kind review of this o.. read more
This is a breathless piece of literary showing off, almost. And there's nothing wrong in that :D I loved the fast paced rhythm and the oxymorons scattered liberally throughout the poem. Very refreshing!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chloe..Across the Universe

4 Years Ago

Thank you! Just turning things backward-thank you very much :)
Abdul Aziz

4 Years Ago

My pleasure :)
What a fantastic trip this was! I love the viole(n)t-eyed cat. I could see those tails swishing. I love the title and the mystical/magical chant to this. Angi~

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chloe..Across the Universe

4 Years Ago

Angi, thank you so much for your kind review, makes me happy to know you liked my mind bending words.. read more
I loved your lines "light as an elephant, heavy as a feather", not something you would expect:) I love your descriptive writing in this piece. thanks for sharing:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chloe..Across the Universe

4 Years Ago

thanks so much i am glad you liked it a movie inspired it , 'Sucker Punch'..thanks
As always you bring forth magic and as always I get lost inside each magnificent piece.. Once again you have taken my senses and twirled them along the ride within your wonderfully penned imagery..

Bravo!

Much love
~Mags~

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chloe..Across the Universe

4 Years Ago

Thanks Mags and it is so good to see you on my page :) Happy you are still here at the cafe.
Expertly penned. I enjoyed every second of the journey. I particularly liked the line "as fast as Mercury" its short but it has multiple interpretations both mythological and celestial. Good write

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Chloe..Across the Universe

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much for your time and review :)
Vale Snipes

4 Years Ago

My pleasure
Wow what a liquid ride, that was a lot of fun! I think I will do it again!

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Chloe..Across the Universe

4 Years Ago

Sorry for the delayed thank you :) Thanks.
Such provocative imagery.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is beautifully penned. Miss you.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Chloe..Across the Universe

4 Years Ago

thank you very much TL. I missed you also :)

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Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR



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