A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

shall we dance


Dance with me
hold me close
sway with me
bone to bone
arms around
arms around

Let the music take us
to another
just you

Not too close
when we are alone
we will fall into
each others skin

For now
just need you
holding me
dance me
and sway
with me


© 2008 Chloe..Across the Universe

Author's Note

Chloe..Across the Universe
restoration .. my mind is numb so no poems or stories come .. they are sleeping

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register

Featured Review

I can almost hear and feel the rhythm of the music in this one. I really love the inner thoughts of the speaker. The flirty way she's like come here, but not too close. Later. That's the way to control a man. Besides they love it when we take command like that. lol

Good read. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago

32 of 32 people found this review constructive.


These words have a lovely feel to them and I can feel the movement in them, It feels like a song

Posted 5 Years Ago

omw i love this... i had a clear image of the couple dancing with the soft music... very good!

Posted 6 Years Ago

I love poems that leave much to the imagination, and this one fits the bill. I also love the repetition. It gives it a sort of melody.

Posted 6 Years Ago

Beautiful, it read to me like movements on a dance floor. Dancing is like poetry, and here, you've just done the opposite :) Well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago

I hear sexual healing in the background as the dancers hold each other up,
softly swaying the night away...

Posted 7 Years Ago

I like that song lol. Surely you know which one I'm talking about ;)
This poem is a wonderful compliment to the song, to movement and rhythm. Nice work :)

Posted 7 Years Ago

we will fall into each others skin.........what a wonderful thought, makes all of me smile.

Posted 7 Years Ago

The words seemed to sway down the page... in a pleasing kind of encounter... close enough for comfort but not too close...

Posted 7 Years Ago

what a lovely array of movements both physical and emotional you've created here with the rhythm of words~ beautiful~

Posted 7 Years Ago

Beautiful and sensual piece of work...Also reminded me of the wonderful song, Sway With Me by michael buble...

Posted 7 Years Ago

First Page first
Previous Page prev
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


118 Reviews
Shelved in 2 Libraries
Added on April 14, 2008
Last Updated on April 14, 2008


Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR

Sometimes i feel like an alien in a strange land..can you relate? I love people and friends are just that to me , friends-if you request me as a friend it would be nice if you read something I have .. more..


Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..