Love Smoke

Love Smoke

A Poem by Paul Bell


I draw you in
Five rings of smoke appear like magic 
Your face on every one 
Christ how romantic am I
Maybe drink a JD  in your honour
It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour 
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine 
You say it's over 
Well, that was out of the blue 
I draw you in 
The sign on the packet
Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you 
So profound 
I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that
You disappear into the clouds
Every one a silver lining.

© 2016 Paul Bell



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I always like it very very much, enjoy it so very much, and admire it when I read a poem or a style that has a real personal touch, like the one here, it gives the words more sincerity, more faithfulness, real and alive feelings, thank You for sharing it my friend.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Paul Bell

2 Weeks Ago

Glad you liked it.
Unique metaphor--or metaphors.
Very fine work, Paul!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Paul Bell

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks, Jimmy.
hmm....quite impressive!!!!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Paul Bell

2 Weeks Ago

And that's just the JD
My my, you make danger sound so exciting. The stream of conscious narration is done to very good effect in this poem.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Paul Bell

2 Weeks Ago

You always fall back on something.
Surreal and bordering on psychedelic, your poem has an open endedness to it which makes for an exciting read. Life like smoke is ephemeral, and hard to clutch at or define. Well written.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Paul Bell

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks Mallika.
Love is quite a powerful thing in the world and this poem that you have written expresses love perfectly. I like this poem a lot and if this is the least you can do, your works are going to get better from here.

Posted 2 Months Ago


"Love Smoke"
Paul Bell,
Is it love or is it addiction; drug of choice? Interesting how much comfort people will "draw" from anything which gives any comfort, even a substitute. I know some relationships are better left to die, this must be one of them. Quite a poem.
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 2 Months Ago


Paul Bell

2 Months Ago

Yeah, some just have to pass by.
Five rings? Is it an Olympic sport?

Posted 2 Months Ago


Paul Bell

2 Months Ago

Was for him. The JD rally. lol
I love those last four lines, made me chuckle a bit. I really enjoyed your words.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Paul Bell

2 Months Ago

Hope I'm not encouraging you to smoke and drink.
I LOVE this! It is definitely real and relevant. I also like the checking of the warning labels of cigarettes versus alcohol.. and you opt for the one that will eventually kill you according to them.. and how you mock the industry at being profound by warning of death. I also love the part that nearly seduced you, her soft sexy voice sending a tingle down your spine, but then the content she delivered of ending it abruptly was bewildering and you can tell that you are pissed and yet somewhere hopeful: "silver lining." Intense, visual writing. I like it!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Paul Bell

3 Months Ago

Man falls back on his best friend. JD. She was to good for him.
Alexa Apothic Red

3 Months Ago

I think that was definitely implied by the seductive quality of her voice and her impetuous breakup.

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