Love Smoke

Love Smoke

A Poem by Paul Bell


I draw you in
Five rings of smoke appear like magic 
Your face on every one 
Christ how romantic am I
Maybe drink a JD  in your honour
It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour 
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine 
You say it's over 
Well, that was out of the blue 
I draw you in 
The sign on the packet
Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you 
So profound 
I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that
You disappear into the clouds
Every one a silver lining.

© 2016 Paul Bell



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I enjoyed that easy intermingling, you do, of habit and relationship, elements (smoke and drink) with body and memory and also the plunking down of a sudden shift or change (the romance is over and it could kill you or you may survive it), one slight step to the left or right, even her voice on the phone at once merging everything together, then cracking open your difference. No warning, and yet you continue to see the connection elsewhere....somehow. Love it. --Melissa

Posted 1 Month Ago


Paul Bell

1 Month Ago

It was going so well as well.
But the drink helped.
Ugh, I'm still in the habit of smoking, which I have to quit soon since it reminds me so much of my ex. It has been something that calms me though, through the roughest & darkest days, it is what has helped me keep my sliver of sanity. It's sad how small things can keep someone coming back to your mind, even after you two are no longer together. And yes, how very romantic you are!

Posted 1 Month Ago


I Am Svetlana

1 Month Ago

I am planning to quit within these next couple days before I start my new job. Hopefully all will go.. read more
Paul Bell

1 Month Ago

You'll do it this time.
I Am Svetlana

1 Month Ago

Keeping my fingers tightly crossed :)
The contrast and word play works well here, Paul. I imagine a man, half drunk, bottle in hand, cigarette loosely between the lips, squiting through the smoke at the bottle’s label. Illusions and delusions from booze and tobacco. Truly enjoyed this one.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Paul Bell

1 Month Ago

I would say you were right.
I like the cool, casual tone you have used here Paul. Some people do look better as silver linings in puffs of fast moving clouds. I feel almost relieved.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Paul Bell

2 Months Ago

They sure do. Hope you dump people by phone.
So much memory keeps haunting you until you find a new vice that proves to dissolve the memories and bring the silver lining - and a breath of fresh air - we’ll done :)


Posted 2 Months Ago


Paul Bell

2 Months Ago

Yeah, vices are good.
I loved the way you express your thoughts through your writings. Its amazing....

Posted 4 Months Ago


Love can definitely be that 'dreaded two-edged sword. Funny how something so remarkable and pleasurable can bring so much pain too.

Posted 5 Months Ago


I loved the way you expressed your feelings in this poem.You also tried to draw the reader's attention towards the darker side..You are indeed a great poet..The flow that your poem has takes the reader alongwith it..
Keep on writing..

Posted 5 Months Ago


Paul Bell

5 Months Ago

Don't you start smoking and drinking now.
Riddhi

5 Months Ago

Ah..I won't ever do that...
I love the way how your poem draws the attention of the reader into its dark side at the same time causes us to think more effectively.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Paul Bell

5 Months Ago

Romance can be dark I think.
Karen John

3 Months Ago

It definitely can.
Loved the romance, the dark humour and the casual flow and feel to your words. Made me feel part of your poem and your feelings. Great job.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Paul Bell

6 Months Ago

Thanks Dee. The JD does it.

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