Love Smoke

Love Smoke

A Poem by Paul Bell


I draw you in
Five rings of smoke appear like magic 
Your face on every one 
Christ how romantic am I
Maybe drink a JD  in your honour
It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour 
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine 
You say it's over 
Well, that was out of the blue 
I draw you in 
The sign on the packet
Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you 
So profound 
I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that
You disappear into the clouds
Every one a silver lining.

© 2016 Paul Bell



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' better to have loved and lost, than never loved at all ' Tennyson me thinks ?

Love the pathos in this short but emotive write, kudos Paul !



Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Thanks Tom.
Striking imagery and the last line sublime.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Thanks Moon.
This feels like a surreal painting coming alive in the magic of this moving smoke. It seemed to shift effortlessly through the real and imagined places of the mind.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Thanks C fromen.
Lovely work Paul, brilliant imagery but the last line may have a typo but that could be me, everyone has a silver lining instead of everyone a silver lining. all the same Class act!

Posted 1 Year Ago


andrew mitchell

8 Months Ago

Now I know where all my review comments are going!!!!! of late barely a trickle and yours too Gee, w.. read more
andrew mitchell

8 Months Ago

Talk about when 8 bells toll!!
Gee

8 Months Ago

I’ll dig out “ A mother’s passing” somebody looked at that !!!
The heart has a knack of not letting go and such things always bring nostalgia expected or unexpected, I like this...nicely done...

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Thanks Poppy. That's a great name.
i like the metaphor ... the smoke rings quite magical in the beginning :} the rough ride of love is painted well ..it has jagged edges no doubt about it ..i wish that Christ's name had not been used as exclamation; but that's just me .. no warning on the JD eh!? ;) its a sure cure for the night if one is persistent ... i like a hot tottie of Jamison meself; but more recently tried the Devil's Cut ..it is pretty darn good sir! ;) the scene is instant and emotive ..especially enjoy the happy ending of silver ..nice one says i ..its rough and manly in love and healing :))
E.


Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Take your point on Christ on board. But i suppose he's praising the lord in his own strange way. Whi.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

in praising we lift up ..and that's a cup of tea i relish .. i did consider that may somehow be the .. read more
Wow, I enjoyed this very much. One can read so much into it, and yet every word evokes imagery that paints a picture. I think my favorite lines were: 'Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you...so profound...I check the bottle of JD...No warning on that. How many times have we all been there, or someplace very similar. I could almost picture myself there with you, leaning back in the chair, a glass of JD in one hand and a cigarette in the other, watching the smoke rising. Great poem. Thank you for the post.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

I'm seeing you heading to the supermarket now.
Smoke! So seductive and overpowering. So damn good with a coffee or glass of wine. So much like the addiction of love, then someone goes 'cold turkey'. Good write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Thanks Ted
A very smartly crafted write, Paul !
I loved the verse "everyone a silver lining".
The similarities you have brought are interesting and they do exist in the love you are speaking about. Love can become sometimes addictive.
Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Thanks Bala
I really enjoyed this write, nicely expressed

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Thanks Blankspace

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