Love Smoke

Love Smoke

A Poem by Paul Bell

I draw you in
Five rings of smoke appear like magic 
Your face on every one 
Christ how romantic am I
Maybe drink a JD  in your honour
It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour 
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine 
You say it's over 
Well, that was out of the blue 
I draw you in 
The sign on the packet
Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you 
So profound 
I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that
You disappear into the clouds
Every one a silver lining.

© 2016 Paul Bell


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It's seductive, destructive, sad, and real....all the things needed to write good poetry. Love the style....

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautiful imagery. Just a lovely piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Paul Bell

7 Years Ago

Thanks Neal.
smoke and love, both will damage your health Paul... and while you are up, could I get a JD please.. make it 2 as reading smoky poems leaves me a bit thirsty...

still drink some but gave up them smokes cause like you her face was always seen in that blue haze, of course it could have been from the booze haze but hey whose counting... lol

loved your poem Paul...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Paul Bell

7 Years Ago

Yeah smoking sucks now. Think JD is just about safe.
metaphorically sensual, story like and sounds casual but hints at the heavy nuance of desiring destruction and how it may just be met, through the lost in hope itself.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Paul Bell

7 Years Ago

Yes, the self destructive curve runs right through him.
Ha Love that tone and Stage.... secondly.....
It reminds me of that older detective series.. geez I don't remember who he was. I am old enough to forget what i remember. His series would always start off in this narrative such as this.... I'm left feeling like I just watched someone who like tried to tell us he was dropped like a hot potato and how deeply she affected him and so much so that he just sits there blowing smoke rings and telling oh how bad it is and yet doesn't feel a thing... Like water off a ducks back. Ha.. So you think it bothers me that you dumped me??

Posted 7 Years Ago


Paul Bell

7 Years Ago

Was that dixon of dock green.
Cryingkate

7 Years Ago

No. I never heard of him.
Cryingkate

5 Years Ago

Kolchak : The Night Stalker LOL Finally just thought of it. That's the voice I hear in this write. I.. read more
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Liked this! Almosttttttt dark even! lol Sounds like I could even belong in my book! Dig this one Paul.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Paul Bell

7 Years Ago

You just like it cos she dumped me, and since it was a poor week, i couldn't afford the bullet to to.. read more
BBP

7 Years Ago

LMAO! I'd let you have a bullet but I couldn't assist in good talent being wasted. lol
BBP

7 Years Ago

Oh and on account of you thinking I'm so dark... I sent you a read request for one of my softer side.. read more
Went through a bunch of your writes, read them all, so I guess I am starting over. Valentine

Posted 7 Years Ago


Paul Bell

7 Years Ago

You'll need to slow down Kathie.
What a unique perspective on love and loss. I especially like the way you capitalized the beginning of each sentence but used no punctuation so that the words seem to hang in the air a moment longer then one expects. The imagery here is superb and there's a mellow dramatic tone to this piece that emphasizes a certain over looked quality of romance that people often misrepresent as malaise. Very interesting use of form and diction; overall well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Paul Bell

7 Years Ago

Thanks Winslow Des Totes. I need your name.
No matter how silvered the linings are we most strive to be master of our actions and not our actions master us. Smoke can be uniquely undescribable at some time----satisfying the feelings that come side by side. But where does it go at draw time?
...if i'm to choose a title for this it'll be "Life like Smoke"

- Homason

Posted 7 Years Ago


Paul Bell

7 Years Ago

I suppose in a way, it's all smoke.
Homason

7 Years Ago

Exactly...
I enjoyed your use of metaphor in this well written poem. The last line is perfection.

Julie

Posted 7 Years Ago


Paul Bell

7 Years Ago

Thanks Julie. Glad you stopped by.

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