Love Smoke

Love Smoke

A Poem by Paul Bell


I draw you in
Five rings of smoke appear like magic 
Your face on every one 
Christ how romantic am I
Maybe drink a JD  in your honour
It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour 
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine 
You say it's over 
Well, that was out of the blue 
I draw you in 
The sign on the packet
Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you 
So profound 
I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that
You disappear into the clouds
Every one a silver lining.

© 2016 Paul Bell



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"It's amazing how little things bring you to me" That line stood out the most for me. Perhaps because I can really relate to that when I'm writing my own poems. Loved reading this piece :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Paul Bell

6 Months Ago

Thanks Giullia, one I like too.
A wonderful write that created so many images and feelings for me from the simplicity of the words, loved this

Posted 7 Months Ago


Paul Bell

7 Months Ago

Thanks, Madeira. One I like myself.
I always like it very very much, enjoy it so very much, and admire it when I read a poem or a style that has a real personal touch, like the one here, it gives the words more sincerity, more faithfulness, real and alive feelings, thank You for sharing it my friend.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Paul Bell

8 Months Ago

Glad you liked it.
Unique metaphor--or metaphors.
Very fine work, Paul!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Paul Bell

8 Months Ago

Thanks, Jimmy.
hmm....quite impressive!!!!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Paul Bell

8 Months Ago

And that's just the JD
My my, you make danger sound so exciting. The stream of conscious narration is done to very good effect in this poem.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Paul Bell

8 Months Ago

You always fall back on something.
Surreal and bordering on psychedelic, your poem has an open endedness to it which makes for an exciting read. Life like smoke is ephemeral, and hard to clutch at or define. Well written.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Paul Bell

8 Months Ago

Thanks Mallika.
Love is quite a powerful thing in the world and this poem that you have written expresses love perfectly. I like this poem a lot and if this is the least you can do, your works are going to get better from here.

Posted 9 Months Ago


"Love Smoke"
Paul Bell,
Is it love or is it addiction; drug of choice? Interesting how much comfort people will "draw" from anything which gives any comfort, even a substitute. I know some relationships are better left to die, this must be one of them. Quite a poem.
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 10 Months Ago


Paul Bell

10 Months Ago

Yeah, some just have to pass by.
Five rings? Is it an Olympic sport?

Posted 10 Months Ago


Paul Bell

10 Months Ago

Was for him. The JD rally. lol

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