Love Smoke

Love Smoke

A Poem by Paul Bell


I draw you in
Five rings of smoke appear like magic 
Your face on every one 
Christ how romantic am I
Maybe drink a JD  in your honour
It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour 
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine 
You say it's over 
Well, that was out of the blue 
I draw you in 
The sign on the packet
Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you 
So profound 
I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that
You disappear into the clouds
Every one a silver lining.

© 2016 Paul Bell



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I love those last four lines, made me chuckle a bit. I really enjoyed your words.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Paul Bell

10 Months Ago

Hope I'm not encouraging you to smoke and drink.
I LOVE this! It is definitely real and relevant. I also like the checking of the warning labels of cigarettes versus alcohol.. and you opt for the one that will eventually kill you according to them.. and how you mock the industry at being profound by warning of death. I also love the part that nearly seduced you, her soft sexy voice sending a tingle down your spine, but then the content she delivered of ending it abruptly was bewildering and you can tell that you are pissed and yet somewhere hopeful: "silver lining." Intense, visual writing. I like it!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Paul Bell

11 Months Ago

Man falls back on his best friend. JD. She was to good for him.
Alexa Apothic Red

11 Months Ago

I think that was definitely implied by the seductive quality of her voice and her impetuous breakup.
You are definitely a hard hitting poet, my friend. Another fantastic poem!

Posted 11 Months Ago


"I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that"
hahaha I love that! this also makes me think of Bukowsky it's got good punch and it's witty

Posted 11 Months Ago


Paul Bell

11 Months Ago

Also tastes great.
Powerful and fantastic. You words flow beautifully. A grand read!

Posted 12 Months Ago


Paul Bell

12 Months Ago

Thanks, Pandapeaceful.
very emotional write here, strong write too in a sense. Very well written

Posted 12 Months Ago


Paul Bell

12 Months Ago

The JD saved the day.
it can be exceeding hard to give up something you find much joy in doing, even though it maybe detrimental to ones own health! Love this. Very inventive and fun to read

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

I think he gave up in woman.
Well as they say "there's no smoke without fire".
This poem flows beautifully and reflects on a past love.
Yet like a spark to a flame could be revived.
The phoenix is set to rise again from the ashes of love.
Ps make mine a double 😊

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Double on the way, Bunny Girl.
Smoking Man

1 Year Ago

Cheers !!!!!!!,bottoms up
The love smoke that can kill... How is it loving? I wonder. The ironic title suits the poem.

"It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine
You say it's over "

At this point i wonder if you were actually referring to a relationship - other than a cigar.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Would he be as shallow as that. Who knows.
This poet from the smoke filled dens of deeds,
throws caution to the wind and on the ground.
Meanful notions cast in rhymless weed,
without iambic meter to be found.

The battle though, is hardly in the bag,
as artists of great skill are wont to rhyme.
We even see a phone call that’s a drag,
but not enough to dull this happy time.

The joy of smoke may send one to the grave,
more quickly than a verse with naught but word.
Gad Zooks, my friends, there must be more to crave,
yet free-verse pleases some, or so I've heard.

This poem does its job (and does it well)
my prejudicial view won’t let me tell.


Posted 1 Year Ago


Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Your review would merit being a poem in its own right. Smoking and JD. It is a marriage of sorts.

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