Father

A tribute to my father

Quite recently, I have seen this movie in which

A girl died and she narrated her story from heaven

She said that there is this great banyan tree in heaven

And under that tree, a soul finds peace and happiness

But to reach it, one must cross a huge field of dry crops

One gets his hands and legs scratched and bruised by their sharp leaves

By the time the helpless soul reaches that tree

It ends up bloody and hurt

But still it finds eternal peace.

For me, life everyday is like walking through that field

And then I come to you and I find my peace

You are my banyan tree,

You are my father.

Our biology teacher always talks about

How we should take care of plants' roots

Supply them with enough nitrates and phosphates

But you know what?

No matter how much sulfates, phosphates and nitrates we supply to the soil

The plant wilts even if it has a single component of nature missing

Guess what?

My 'roots' is a man who has become very thin over the years

But he anchors our whole family to the ground

On him stands a huge fat trunk of responsibilities

The funny thing is- he doesn't need nitrates or phosphates of any sort

He just carries on giving

He is my father.

Author's Note

I've written some poems about my mom but this is my first serious poem about my father and i really mean every word i said. What do you think?

Reviews

[CecilA]

Lonely Islander,

You are a wonderful child and your father is a wonderful man; the evidence is your poem.

This piece is well thought out and written. I envy you, in a good way, because I never met my father. But I have photos and the relevations of 4 sisters, uncles, aunts, and cousins.

Suggestions:

'Recently I saw a movie in which'

'By the time (no comma) ------'

'Supply them with enough nitrates and phosphates'

'On him rests a hugh trunk of responsibilities'

'Funny thing is; he doesn't need nitrates or phosphates'

'He just keeps on supporting and giving'

These are just my interpretations of your wonderful poem and how I would go about writing it my way. No criticisms from me. I love this poem. It has such depth of emotion, genuine love, and admiration. I felt the dry ground, the cuts, bruises and feel the warm, moist blood dripping down my arms and legs. Suddenly, I behold the immense Banyan tree whose trunks have grown roots into the ground surroounding it.

I sense the flow of the nutrients flowing in the tree's sap up from the soil rich with phosphates and nitrates. Suddenly, that tree turns into my father. A great man who doesn't need phosphates and nitrates to bear the burdens of family. Steadfastly he supports his wife and children and provides the essential love and caring without wavering because he is deeply rooted in integrity coupled with compassion.

Great write. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Sincerely, CecilA

[Lonely Islander]

Dear CecilA, thank you so much for that wonderful review...you are right about about my father being a wonderful man but i dont think i am a wonderful child but i try my best to be...i am sorry about the fact that you havent seen your father but you have a huge family which however i dont lol..i will definitely take your suggestions into account and thank you so much again for taking your time to write such a wonderful review..it really means a lot:-):-):-D.

[Kaylee]

This is fantastic; by far one of the best 'father' poems I have read. (I'm a sucker for parent poems.) I love the banyan tree story/metaphor, that was very unique and pretty cool. It made me think of my own wonderful father, and isn't a poem always so much better when you can relate to it? Thank you so much for sharing! :)

[Lonely Islander]

Thanks for the review...and yes poetry seems great when you can relate..im glad you could do so:-).

[Infurno-Blaze]

i think its clever how u spoke of the beauty of nature, and da fact that you reali love your father....i never had one, but now i hav an idea how i feels like to hav one...ama ryt one about my father whom i neva had...thankx fo da inspiration.

[Lonely Islander]

Thank u so much for the review...im glad u enjoyed it:-):-):-D.

[T*Fuyumi]

Wow. Your daddy sounds like a wonderful and responsible daddy ((: I liked the part where you compared how trees needed nitrates and stuff but your father doesn't! ^^

[Lonely Islander]

Thanks so much:-):-):-D.

[Pax]

your a wonderful child dear friend... you have reflect what your father is to you...
i guess your father is a hard working fellow who loves his family...
you did a fine job on this...

[Lonely Islander]

Well you r right about my dad but i dunno about me..thank you for reading:-):-):-D.

[Pax]

your wonderful... you just don't see it yet... just do what's good for the best... and your most welcome my friend..

[Lonely Islander]

:-)