Poisoned

Sonnet on broken love

 

Poisoned   Her love was like a sunny, summer day. My passion soared to heights of ecstasy; Forever dreams spun in a joyous melody. How soon her sting had swooped my love away! Black widow's hidden poison masked as love, She sucked me dry and walked without a care; Her spider's web became temptation's snare. She'd seemed a vision sent from heav'n above. Regretful moans, the remnants I possess, She left me voiceless, gasping for my breath. This bitter man who's tainted from love's death Won't talk of bliss or sing of happiness. No soothing words can mend my broken heart For I despise the sight of cupid's dart. By Sharon Miller Bolander   © 2008 Peggy Paris (All rights reserved)

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

No soothing words can mend my broken heart
For I despise the sight of cupid's dart.


A sad love Sonnet 'Alas nothing mends a broken heart~ That's for sure

loved your ending couplet ~ as always your rhyme scheme is superb

with cadence spot on~ A great job on this well crafted Sonnet~

THanks Sharon for submitting to Sonneteers/Tears Contest~

Fran Marie

[Salvatore Buttaci]

I love sonnets, but not all I've read are as well-crafted as yours. I enjoyed reading it.

Sal

[Samuel Dickens]

A terrific sonnet, Sharon, and the spider analogy is quite effective. I don't know of an antidote to cupid's dart, however.

[Emily Rose]

Such a touching, but sad sonnet! I really like the comparison to a black widow - a subtle, but deadly creature. Your rhyme and meter were spot-on too! I, of course, have to remark upon the punctuation - a few of those periods probably would've been better served as commas - but otherwise, fantastic job!