On Standby

Going through a rough patch emotionally right now and felt the need to vent through this medium

I could stand,
stand here forever as you pass by.
I may not wish to,
but I would for you.

To never touch the silk of your face,
Would cause such pain.
But yet to never see the ocean pools of your eyes,
Would be my final undoing.

To know you'll never smile at me again,
but yet you'll continue that grin,
well, the empty cavern that made residence
inside me will forever be.

Feeling love,
feeling love with no explanation.
No expression but yet no regret
is pain.

Deep resting pain,
a scar that wont leave.
It will be engrained on me for life,
But I guess this is love.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

The photo being at the bottom instead of the top, works perfectly!! From the little pic, to poem, to the final picture, there is this cascading effect on the mind to absorb and swell on ideas of the romanticism involved, without the distraction a picture provides.... I use them in all my poems, as well. This is gorgeous!! No promises, no awkward lines, no immature ramble... just really beautiful poetry, written in a way that made this memorable for me. I hate being impressed because it blocks my mind from typing. lol Beautiful, Sarah... xoxo -Mark

[Glen Yumang Manese]

A reflective moment... resonate in each word of this verse... the longing... the written admission... the eye of the storm before the whole moment is washed away to oblivion...

[Ruhoun Q. Geins]

It's a topic that everyone could relate to. I liked this one very much.

[John Fitzgerald]

i hope one day soon, you'll say, time has abandoned his raincoat; the harbingers of summer are here! I sometimes think poetry can act as the hand that slams the door in sorrow's face. in poetry we can say, let us hear the wiseman and the fool. when the bright sun gleams, sweet lady, you will find peace again :)

[A Poet Named Garit]

I love how the last line just wraps it all up into a single thought that's so vague yet definite. You really capture that sense of a deep metaphorical wound, it embodies the pain that comes with love and love lost and its incredible. What I really like about this piece is that you had the capability to talk about love and the hurt that is tied to it without getting really lame and s****y. It really just screams out "this is my raw feelings" not "i forced this onto 'paper' ". Very good job.

[Forest Green]

The final line is great...encapsulates the theme and thoughts.

Nice piece...

[Brandon Langley]

I'm not sure that words can capture the... amazingness of this poem(perhaps because the picture is covering up half of the review text box), it captures the essence of forlorn love, of... Wow... Just... wow... It's... GREAT

[Sarah F-W]

Thank you so much, i will edit it later and move the photo to the top :)

[Archangel Gabriel]

The pain on the page is palpable. Such a sad and forlorn end to an investment made in another.

[Sarah F-W]

Thank you, exactly what I was trying to express :)