~Autumn Cross~

This is a poem, which is also the chorus to a song of the same name... the poem reflects my personal struggle with depression, and frustration I feel at the reckless souls in my life.

~Autumn Cross~

 

Find me in autumn; the fall of this man

Mind leaves are falling, covering land

I’ve become the scarecrow left alone in minefield

Holding onto my fear time trusted rusted shield

Find me in autumn, my nature’s wasteland

Pry me from this cross, offer your plan

‘Cause I’m a scarecrow sufferin’ my head’s last straw

Shooin’ flocks of clocks, tick tock, my heart beats raw

Yeah, strapped to my thoughts, so unable to cope

Bound to my cross, blind, hoping for hope

Oh, empty me of empty

Empty me of empty

Reviews

[Livin'todieCS]

Hi Petrichor! Thanks for your honesty in the description section :). I've also experienced both those things so I appreciate that you're open about it.

I really liked the phrase "mind leaves", which i took to be thoughts? sometimes thoughts can be consuming and i liked the way you put it: "mind leaves are falling, covering land", like these thoughts are falling all over the place. But since they're described as 'leaves', they fall in silence, they're light, they aren't threatening, which i thought was an interesting way to describe thoughts during depression (instead of it being something heavy or scary). The Autumn feel also drew in this sense of serenity, solitude, and inner wisdom for me.

My favorite line was "shooin' flocks of clocks, tick tock, my heart beats raw". I internalized that to be the times when we feel most alive, whether it's a time of fear or intense joy, but whatever the situation our hearts are beating hard and we can feel it. And in that moment, the last thing we want to be reminded of is time, the thing we try to escape from, but always seems to find us. I love the structure and rhyme of this line.

The last two lines are brilliant. It's a cry to be relieved of this 'nothingness', of feeling 'nothing' that defines depression. It's not a plea to be rid of 'sadness' or 'anger' or any type of emotion. There's no emotion. And that's the worst thing i think.

Thanks for sharing :)!

[Petrichor]

I appreciate the review... this is part of a song I wrote last October... very specific emotions going on in my mind and you seemed to relate/interpret them wonderfully... thanx so much.

[Livin'todieCS]

Oh good! glad to hear that!

[Cool Handless Luke]

Empty me of empty....I believe I have been there. Sometimes I think I still am. I love the imagery of the scarecrow and cross etc. Mind leaves are falling line is awesome. Great write and flow to it.

[Hanhil]

Beautiful Ryan. Beautiful. And the line that really got to me would be 'Empty me of Empty'. That line really struck a chord in me.

[Petrichor]

So happy you liked this. Your opinion matters to me, dudette; a lot. 'Empty me of empty' is my perpetual prayer... hard for me to even sing this song/poem without getting choked up. It's like reading my soul.

[Chrys_Pap]

what a magnificent closure! very powerful

[Petrichor]

Thanx so much; great to meet u.