Purpose

Purpose

A Poem by Ph.D in Victory
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I question myself about this sometimes.

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The light, it will always glow
The wind, it will always blow
The water, it will always flow 
The time, it will always go
My thoughts, they will always grow 
The sad, they will always woe
The smart, they will always know 
The plants, they will always grow 
Everything has a purpose, 
But do I? 
I don't know
Everyone seems to say so
As my thoughts of doubt cease to grow 
I say to myself, "yes, now I know"  
Thanks to you, I now know 
I have a purpose...
It is to love you

© 2010 Ph.D in Victory



Author's Note

Ph.D in Victory
What do you think of the rhyming? I liked it okay. (I'm only 12.) Please review :)

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It has a nice flow,
but I don't quite know,
how to let you know,
that rhyming isn't all it's cracked upto be :)
Think balance, not rhymes :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Your rhyming is very very good, and good job.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I liked your rhyming. This is a very good write.
Well done

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

..i like it..nice rhyme...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice work Love it. Keep it up God bless lily

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Funny, the previous 3 comments state that you're rhyming was very good. I was have to disagree. The first half of the poem had nice rhymes and I enjoyed it, then you sort of faded off in some other direction with it. THEN YOU GO BACK!? Oh come on, man, you're killing me here. I loved the poem but the rhyming totally messed with me here. Yeah the rhyming was good, then it was horrible then it rested on a total nightmare... this is harsh, yes, but it's because you didn't rhyme then you went back to it. Other than that I love the poem's meaning.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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it's called monorhyme and you did a pretty good job, the problem will this type of poem is that you force the rhyme, just to make it fit..but you seems to have produced a solid poem. well penned

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the rhyming sequence is done very well~ the subject matter poignantly displayed~ it may take longer for some but eventually we all come to our purpose~ =)~ well done~

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it.
It is rhythmic, entertaining and purposeful.
A great blend overall, with a perfect ending.
I spent 25 years defining purpose and some kid spells it out in a few lines.
Life is a strange and wondrous thing.....

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Ph.D in Victory
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Mill Creek, WA



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