slipping past first impressions

slipping past first impressions

A Poem by Phibby Venable


There is a place that sells beer,
makes music, drops to a whisper
at two a.m.
and everyone becomes a wanderer
on the dance floor
where a light turns overhead
throwing soft strikes
into the warm dark
of arms entwined into
a universe of two

There is a plank porch outside
to watch the moon
which is hanging heavy, red-faced
and still at so many expectations
There is a whole world
of girls consuming kisses,
lit beauty in freed faces
Robberies of reputation,
slow words so quiet they lose them
The small town of mutual longings
paling invisible by morning

Such a long night.

But morning thinks nothing of that.

The sun stays busy

finding crystals on the new buds
of trees. The mountain sits blue,

but yellow is spreading

in glistening gold strikes.




© 2013 Phibby Venable

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Took me back to my 17, 18 year old self. Disco balls, slow dancing, chasing the girls with the long ago lost reputations.
You write beautifully, reads oh so easily and I'm more than a little jealous of your gift

Posted 1 Year Ago

Wow! I've been to this place. And you discibed it to a T. Thank you for the memory. You made my night.

Posted 3 Years Ago

implied realities and dreaming on the moon..a porch with planks just for this...such vivid descriptions ..Laury

Posted 5 Years Ago

what a great description and it made me recollect a couple places like this...where we danced and talked and kissed long into the morning.

thank you for the flashback.


Posted 5 Years Ago

Phibby Venable

5 Years Ago

thank you so much for the generous review, Jacob. you are very welcome xx
oh, Phibby, your words have more and more longing as time passes, how do you pack so much extra in?

Posted 5 Years Ago

Phibby Venable

5 Years Ago

thank you my sweet has been a difficult but enlightening few years. much love to you.
For lovers and would-be lovers, this sounds like the place to be. As always, nice work, Phibby.

Posted 5 Years Ago

Phibby Venable

5 Years Ago

thank you so much, Sam, working on a book of short stories & I have mostly secluded xxx
Samuel Dickens

5 Years Ago

Good luck with it, and take care.

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Added on April 20, 2013
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Phibby Venable
Phibby Venable

abingdon, VA

About I live in the mountains of Southwest Virginia. Although my passion is poetry, I recently published a novel called, Women of the Round Tabl.. more..


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