Too Much

Double Senryu linked format … something new!

Too Much

Dwell upon this thought

A balloon takes on new form

When it’s inflated

But too much pressure

Will bring it to busting point

And bang, it’s no more

Copyright @ Phillozofee 2018

Reviews

[emmaferris]

Cats can easily get overheated. Think about it - they walked around in thick fur coats all day, even in hot weather. Cats that are not used to outdoor are particularly https://www.dissertationhub.co.uk/
prone to overheating. If this happens, the cat is at risk of heat stroke.

[Malvika]

I like how you have related balloon to life cause we are the ones who inflate our life's and burst very often when there is just too much to handle

[Karen John]

The balloon reminds me of life. Life without balance is soon expected to burst into nothingness. Too much or too less of anything is bad for one's life.

[Onlyme]

Like a human also. To much pressure and he will have a nervous breakdown. Made me think of that reading your poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

as we take on new form when pressured or inflated...either egos no one wants to deal with or we may crack under pressure and explode--

what we hope is for enough balance on the outside and inside that we may float comfortably...above the fray...and go the distance.
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Somehow this reads to me like an excellent analogy for us humans, of how we are prone to bursting points 'cause of the pressures of life and more and still with the capability to take up new forms. ..
Nice write, made me think. And also that I should try writing a senryu soon :D

[Just Kim]

Ahh just when it was full of life, it loses its life,
excellent wording.

[phill..m]

Bang, it now takes on a new form, fragments, with it's
entropy transferred outward. Great, poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting thoughts written in the poem. Too much pressure and can blow-up. Mean relax and slow down. Allow things to blow-up at their will. Thank you Phil for sharing your words and your thoughts.
Coyote