Stomaching the truth

She was her own brand of candy

Pleasant at first

Succulent and sweet

But the more her name

Rolled off of your tongue

The more sour

And the more bitter

She became 

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

wow this is a great little bite of a poem.

[Tree]

I liked this little piece very much. Sometimes you string together a set of words, tugged along by a great idea, then, just like magic, it forms into a perfect expression. Had I written this compact gem, that is exactly, how I would have felt.

Diego Paz

[Basu Gupta]

short but expressive..
loved the comparisons..
thanks for sharing

[J. Alfred Prufrock]

this made me smile. the best poems are the ones people can identify with. you trulyhave the eyes of a poet, that unique perspective that is essential for a poet. well, done. keep thinking and keep writing.

[Buddhistboy73]

an intriguing write....:)
Love the idea of using sugar and sweetness to take the reader on the journey and visualise the meaning behind this piece...
creative.....thanks for sharing...
BB

[dillonjensen]

The feels this poem offers itself to the reader. Very impressive in such few words, I must say. Keep writing!

[Anand Sehgal]

As time progresses , every single establishment faces the erosion !

[costa siwale]

Incredibly sensible, lyrical and short. Love it ! Well written

[Zach]

This is a fun little piece. I'd like to know more about this rare "brand of candy"

[gabrielle]

Very intriguing write. it shows that our first impression could be a mistake. nicely penned.