Beyond The Looking Glass
A Book by Pillow Of Winds
 A young man is enjoying an ordinary day when he is huanted by the visions from another mysterious world  © 2010 Pillow Of Winds
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Well, I guess there's a backstory to this RR..
Your description was great, but be careful not to overdo it.
The biggest thing I would suggest is watching out for repeats. Not just in words but descriptions as well. Also, some of the sentences could be broken up or combined. I only saw this on occasion so it's not much of a problem.
I agree that this would be a good idea for a book.
Posted 13 Years Ago
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I imagine this will continue to a book... Not bad. Just a bit more definition or description over what is happening in the bathroom. Some very good prose overall. You should send this to Domenic Luciani. He is a very good young writer of similar stories on here. In fact, I will send him a RR for this:) BTW...love Pink Floyd!
Posted 13 Years Ago
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Pillow Of WindsStirling, United Kingdom
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I'm a 17 year old student at Stirling High School and an aspiring writer. Basically i joined this site in search of review and hints from other writers to help me improve and this site seemed better t.. more..
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