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Apathetic Blurred Lines

Apathetic Blurred Lines

A Poem by PoppySilver

Distract the mind

mahjong or Ramayana

disengage frazzled perception

words or symbols are but ice 

to add to shards of glass

when the will to write or fight

is impaled

bled out

on scorched, down trodden grass


©2016 PoppySilver

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© 2016 PoppySilver



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dan
Apathy is one of the scourges of human discourse, for those bereft of feeling and questioning with any interest at all. I'm not sure I get the inclusion of mahjong (since I don't know how it is played), but the imagery of ice and shards of glass (a certain symmetry implied) is very strong, and to bleed out on scorched downtrodden grass suggests a conclusion that bypasses any apathy extant. A very strong piece, Poppy. take care...dan

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PoppySilver

2 Years Ago

Take care too Dan and many thanks once again for such an insightful and kind review :)



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Like shards were actually mixed into chocolate mousse.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Loved the imagery. . .well written. . .

Posted 2 Years Ago


Funny your actual poem
The body of it feels like a blur
Pretty neat
Well Apathy is the mother of human death
Makes the world a very bland place
I find it pretty clever how you took this idea and placed into words ......

Posted 2 Years Ago


When times are rough return to writings is therapy for the soul Broadens the mind and releases anger and stress your works are well spoken I'm Understanding much

Posted 2 Years Ago


holding in thoughts definitely does make us feel frozen, hardened without release...interesting perspective

Posted 2 Years Ago


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PoppySilver

2 Years Ago

Many thanks love :)
WoW!!!
this is amazing.........i don't know what to say.......you have said so much in so few lines........
i loved it!!!!
:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


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PoppySilver

2 Years Ago

Thank you :)
I played a lot of mahjong to mesmerize my mind thru a year of relentless physical pain, so I know exactly what you're describing here so crystal clear.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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PoppySilver

2 Years Ago

barleygirl, many thank yous :)
Powerful and honest words dear poet.
"words or symbols are but ice
to add to shards of glass"
We must bleed to live. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PoppySilver

2 Years Ago

So true...thanks love :)
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome dear friend.
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dan
Apathy is one of the scourges of human discourse, for those bereft of feeling and questioning with any interest at all. I'm not sure I get the inclusion of mahjong (since I don't know how it is played), but the imagery of ice and shards of glass (a certain symmetry implied) is very strong, and to bleed out on scorched downtrodden grass suggests a conclusion that bypasses any apathy extant. A very strong piece, Poppy. take care...dan

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PoppySilver

2 Years Ago

Take care too Dan and many thanks once again for such an insightful and kind review :)
Hey Ruth, this is quite a poetic statement, great uses of words to validate your point.
Very cool. Thanks EG.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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PoppySilver

2 Years Ago

Many thanks E G :)

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