She Dreams Of the Sea With Strawberries and Cream

She Dreams Of the Sea With Strawberries and Cream

A Poem by Vicki Ruth
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For my Nan...a visit that humbled me...

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I always wanted to see a storm at sea
she said with a smile and somehow I saw
a woman I have always loved and admired
a female figure that with her loss of memory
has become child-like in her innocence again
if I live, we can go to the sea next year
she laughed as I prepared her strawberries
I agreed for time is short, I sadly thought
it seems so finite and the waves pause for no-one
a trip to the sea feels like a life time away
though I didn't say such and let her dream
as she gently swayed and savoured
each strawberry dipped in cream





©2016 PoppySilver

© 2016 Vicki Ruth



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This is one of the best of yours that I've read so far! I love this little vignette of sweet caring & compassionate understanding. This is the poster child for "SHOW, don't TELL" . . . in that you are teaching your reader about kindness without ever coming across as preachy. Plus, it's just strong visual writing that sounds completely original & without anything even slightly cliché (amongst a zillion poems written about the sea). Excellent consonance/rhyme with "dreams" and "cream" . . . excellent alliteration in the second line, which is seemingly made up of simple words, but rolls off the tongue so artfully.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Vicki Ruth

2 Years Ago

barletygirl, thank you very much love, I really appreciate that, much love to you :)



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Lovely piece. Keep Writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


This poem reminded me of my grandma, towards her end, she too became childlike, and this is a sweet tribute to the dreamer of seas.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Vicki Ruth

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Rebecca :)
I'm glad I rummaged through your catalog, it was well worth it to read this jewel. Truly heartfelt poetry. Kudos!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Vicki Ruth

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Paloma :)
Just beautiful. Ruth, you're a brilliant writer

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Vicki Ruth

2 Years Ago

Baby, that means a lot, thank you :)
"a female figure that with her loss of memory
has become child-like in her innocence again"

sad lines - they express a truth that comes from observation, not pretentious thinking

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Vicki Ruth

2 Years Ago

Thank you Cascara, very much :)
To take care of those in strife is the best reward a soul can harbor, well done, good read.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Vicki Ruth

2 Years Ago

Thomas, thanks lovely :)
This reminded me of what it like what it feels like for a loved one with Alzheimer's or dementia. Loved it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Vicki Ruth

2 Years Ago

Dementia, yes...thank you hon :)
A lovely rhythm, and relationship between the writer and one one who wants to see the sea. It is compassionate not to tell her that's not possible, to let her dream, and feed her strawberries. Gentle, loving, visual, kindness is here, even if reality sits under the surface unspoken. Let her dream. Lovely, thank you.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vicki Ruth

2 Years Ago

Thank you Marianne, I shall let her dream :)
Wow. I loved the simplicity of this poem. It conveyed a "distant" impact while still maintaining the emotional impact that a poem should have. I basically mean that I felt the emotion in a passive sort of way, as if there is some sort of underlying emotion in this. I hope that made sense. I enjoyed reading this.

-William Liston

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Vicki Ruth

2 Years Ago

It makes sense and I appreciate your thoughts very much, thank you William :)
Love the first line about the storm!
Keep on writing!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Vicki Ruth

2 Years Ago

Thanks Emily...

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