Darkness

Darkness

A Poem by Poseidon
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Experience I had when dealing with a loved one and a major life event.

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Thought today was going to be like any other

Until I got the call

Words escape my memory

The emotions however do not

Hesitation mixed with intense grief

Sobs, Stutters, Sadness

All beckon me forward

Rules seemed to fall to the wayside

Only one thing became important

Thoughts race in 360’s

No solution in sight

I arrive at her door step

Heart running double time

I come in to find you on the couch

Tears staining everything around you

Cheeks, Shirt, Wine Glass

The sadness permeates the room

Enveloping all within reach

My first instinct is to make contact

I wrap her up tightly in my arms

I can feel pieces starting to slip away

I can’t hold them together

It’s overwhelming

I look for words to fix what has happened

No combination of phrases bring reason

All I can hope to do

Is send my positive energy to her

But my light is swallowed by this darkness

This darkness will never leave

But day by day it will recede

© 2015 Poseidon


Author's Note

Poseidon
All criticism is welcome.

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How could one critique such heartfelt anguish?
You leave a few pieces open for the reader to transfer their own darkness.
Yes, it can receded. Only with new light...
Touching write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Poseidon

8 Years Ago

Thank you! I am glad you liked it. I like your concept of replacing darkness with a new light. I did.. read more
Well done. The pain within this piece is so strong. Your emotions bleed in this piece. The inability to console in times of grief leave us empty wanting to help, but when you are connected to the loss, it is near impossible.

This feels to be a release of anger and pain in the real world and not just a poetic piece.

Peace Out.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Poseidon

8 Years Ago

You are really spot on with all that you had to say. Glad I was able to convey those emotions. Thank.. read more
Willard Wells

8 Years Ago

Sorry for your loss and pain.
Poseidon

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your condolence.
This has a lot of emotion entwined in each line. Enjoyed this flow not only cause it is deep but It was easy to feel the hurt. (:

Posted 8 Years Ago


Poseidon

8 Years Ago

Thanks for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

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Added on December 6, 2015
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Tags: love, darkness, emotion, grief

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Poseidon

Big Rapids, MI



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