Men do not cry

I was around 2 years,

Started to utter,

Louder and louder,

Coz momma was not around ,

Demanding nothing,

Someone whispered "come on baby , male should not cry"

It was five,

I didn't get the chocolate of my choice,

My eyes started getting wet ,

Suddenly someone teased

"Male should not cry "

I was 10 ,

There was a heavy rain,

I was racing my mountain bike,

But suddenly lost the balance,

I met an accident,

With the hands scratched and bloods scattered around

I started to Sober in pain

Meanwhile someone poked

"Men do not cry"

I were 18,

Left my home for the studies ,

Meanwhile hugged dad mom tight

Sympathised own self every thing gets alright

With the watery eyes I was on the way

Someone pointed

"Male should not cry "

I was 20,

The fresh first love ,

Commitments of truth

When took the way of disbelief and i got deceived

I cried the nights

Someone nodded "Men does not cry"

Yes

Now I barely cry,

These eyes just gazes,

These eyes just watches the things going around

No matter the pain strikes my brain

I smile and remember,

Yes "Men do not cry"

Tears should not roll through their cheeks

Yes "men do not cry " 

Posted on:http://pratikbhandari137.blogspot.in/2014/11/men-do-not-cry.html

Reviews

[Ricky Campbell]

Wow, this is powerful, grammar needs help but whos doesn't? Great message, powerful depicting societys standards today. Very good!

[Rowan Crow]

I like this a lot. I can envision what is happening, and It is very realistic. The social expectation that men should not cry is I believe slightly mocked in this poem. I enjoyed reading it, and I think the only errors were previously pointed out. So nice Job!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

This is good. You have a few typos
"It was five"
"I was five"
"male should not cry"
"Males should not cry"

But other then that it is really good

[Pratik Bhandari]

Thank you so much :) ...Really appreciate that !!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

My pleasure!!!