Pessimist

Here is the narration of a man just deprieved of every hope and love of this nasty world....I HOPE YOU'LL LIKE IT.

The endless, barren life is vain.
Shorn off hope and all disdain.

Only can I hear the solitary voice:
"No reason with you to rejoice!".

My luck pretends never to shine.
"Where will lead the destiny mine!".

The incredulous world to my thought ever,
enlisted my mind in the eccentric fewer.

In the world renounced none to criticize.
Even the upcoming hell not to me a surprise.

The brief statement I only insist:
"No sight is worse than pessimist".

Reviews

[John McFadyen]

Hi Pritesh,
Short poems should never be apologised for. It is more difficult to capture emotion and vision in them. You have done a great job here in a lovely poem with good meter and metaphor. You are young you will get over such set backs enjoy life and don't be a victim be a vixen!

[Pritesh]

thanks!

[jasmine thurber]

Good poem.I think you did great, I bet you will do a lot better on the next poem you make.hope you have fun writing another phone!a!

[Pritesh]

thanks!

[Barbara Walker]

You nail it on the head with your words. i like the way you convey your intent.

[Baby Ricochet]

There's been times I felt that way. Great write Pritesh.

[Pritesh]

thanks

[Carolann Dowsett]

Sometimes its hard in life to be an optimist when so many things around you seem to fall apart and there seems to be no hope you have capture this emotion well here. Nicely written.

[Pritesh]

thanks for the kind review

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[Divya]

Disillusionment happens. You have written a great poem out of it. I liked it a lot.

[Pritesh]

thanks for ur kind review

[Inda]

Awesome rhythm and the last two lines really brings us down into a soft landing. Great write!

[Pritesh]

thanks for the kind review...

[Inda]

no prob!

[Aurora (Sal)]

"The luck pretends never to shine,
where will lead the destiny mine.''

i love these lines, they are full of it!, i don't know what 'it' is but i can feel it
sorry if i don't make any sence at all XD
great poem, with great emotions, keep up!

[Pritesh]

thanks for the kind review! And for 'it' haha...:-D

[Aurora (Sal)]

:D you are welcome

[j]

Its A Very "Dark" Poem That Has A Lot Of Meaning And Depth To It, And Even Though Its Short, It Flows Really Well. The Way You Expressed Emotion Using Few Words Is Quite Amazing, As Well.

[sid_yadav]

Great poem Pritesh, I don't think you should apologize for short poems, I find it a lot more difficult to capture emotions in short poems and you have done that very well here, great use of metaphor as well. Either way I think poems should be written according to what you have in your mind instead of hanging on to others' view; other writers' views help us better ourselves but they shouldn't define us...good write!!