Continuation

The skin of time felt like silk to us,

together held in limbo,

until we are deemed ready for love.

 

The dream makers waiting

they wrenched their wrists and

hold their breath in collective anticipation.

 

One day closer to complete.

 

Reviews

[Michael Lopez]

I love this. Its short N deep. Awesome job.


My fave part....

Together held in limbo, until we are deemed ready for love.

[V.B.]

That last line is like a poem by itself. It both sums up the optimism of the first two stanzas, and says everything it seems like you were trying to say all at once. It's one of those lines that, for me, would be an excuse to write something just for the sake of using it.