Misery's Peak

The love we shared is but ruined;

The love I want is finished.

The feelings we once had, now lost;

The feeling I have, a high cost.

The cost to know love’s taste,

The truth it brings to face.

The pain that now I have to own;

To death I must sing my tone.

The pain it brings to love anew,

The fears I have are not few.

People live and love abroad;

Only I, to know a fraud.

To death I go, now I seek;

The truth is, but misery’s peak.

My mind to be free from hurt,

For humanity I must desert.

Author's Note

If any one could give me an idea of the title, please I am quite unimaginative when it comes to this.

Reviews

[Chenin Marie]

People live and love abroad;
Only I, to know a fraud.

great lines!

[Nigel Newman]

Caleb Hi. I'm with one of the other replies in suggesting Misery's Peak, as this adds a hook in the middle of the poem that helps tie it together.

If I'm totally honest, I found the style of the language and the rhymes a little 'un-genuine'. It didn't feel like this was really from your heart, gut, soul, or wherever. It felt like you had chosen to adopt a particular style of poetry and then worked within that. I was reminded of a scene from a play or movie where the jilted admirer is 'trying it on' with the object of their desires by using poetic phrases delivered with overdramatic emphasis, then periodically looking out of the corner of their eyes to see if it's having any effect. If I'm wrong, and you're truly in the angst of a broken relationship, please accept my apologies. And I hope you don't mind me being so critical - I've been there, and sometimes the 'answer' for me was to write what I truly felt almost randomly on a piece of paper, and then I might see a lyrical form seem to emerge from the randomness, and that would become the heart of the lyric or poem.

[Caleb]

Thank you for your criticism every bit helps. In regards to the 'un-genuine" part it's half and half. Everything I write is over exaggerated; for if it was not, no one would care to listen to what I have to say. And as for the title I do like Misery's Peak, it gives a very alluring hook.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

A good poem with nice rhyming. You talk of love which has ended. You talk about how painful it is to woo somebody else after one relationship ends.
Pain is the most obvious outcome of separation- you express your misery and your profound sorrow and say that your sadness will remain forever- you will be plunged in her memories forever.
As for a title for your poem, I suggest these ones-
The price of love.
When separation meets us.
Woeful tale of separation.
The sorrowed lover.

Well-written and keep writing.

[Armistead Lindsey]

I know your struggle with naming, I have the same issue all the time, often i just go for whatever title first comes to my mind - if it is important to me it normally just springs itself at me.

My ideas for a title:
-Tormented Lover
-Love no more
-Scorned heart

You could use lines from the poem as your title, I personally liked the lines/phrases:
-Misery's peak
-To know love's taste
-The feeling I have, a high cost - with this one you could write it as The feelings I have (a high cost)

Hope I've helped a bit.
Lovely writing, Keep going!

My only criticism would be the lack of full stops (.), I think increasing their use would give certain lines more impact and convey the idea of love having ended.

I would appreciate it if you could look over some of my own poetry (not necessary but appreciated)

[Caleb]

Yea I usually just write my poetry and then I insert punctuation after; but in the case, I forgot.

[Armistead Lindsey]

I frequently do that myself too :)