Can I be bold?

Can I be bold for just a second?

Yes, you should worry, this won’t be pleasant.

Did you know in life there’s more

When love comes banging at your door?

Did you ever wonder why

At your call I always fly?

Did you ever stop and wait

To think of the love taking shape?

You know, I never thought,

Of all the fights I’ve fought,

That you were not even on my side;

Hell, you weren’t even on the ride.

You know, you should never just disappear;

It brings nothing, but bitter tears.

Hell, why would you even care?

Why can I not even bare

The thought of losing a w***e?

Why should I ask for more?

Why only question? I have no answer

For the girl I see, she taste like cancer.

You know, I used to have pain for this loss,

But now anger has stepped in to cause

A fire that burns a brighter hue

Than the love I ever had for you.

Reviews

[Jess]

''A fire that burns a brighter hue
Than the love I ever had for you.''---damn beautiful lines!
A powerful write.

[Caleb]

Idk all the anger from that relationship finally caught up to me so this just came out. Thank you for the review.

[Jess]

I see.
Welcome.

[Chenin Marie]

Powerful...definitely spoke to the mood I'm in right now. Your rhyming and style is just perfect

[Caleb]

I wouldn't say perfect. The meter is still messed up, but thank you for the possible thought of perfection.

[Chenin Marie]

What is perfection really though?

[Caleb]

Idk, but I think tomorrow I will have a response to that

[Chenin Marie]

Haha I'll be waiting

[Ellis Sullivan]

Its really good and I can totally relate I like the way you wrote it a lot.

[Caleb]

The way I wrote it was more for being said and not read, if that makes since. Instead of someone reading it in a dark corner it should be read out loud. Thank you for the review; every bit of encouragement helps.