Sunfire Love

A song of words about my love for the life source that keeps us all growing.

Sunfire Love

I am in love with the morning

Because of the light

It breaks so openly

Without any fight.

Clouds part, sky blue

The rays shine, a deafening hue.

 

The day condescends

Above over night

Gleaming and glowing

From an incredible height.

Hours of loving

Some hours of sleep

The earth has its laws

Fixed ever so deep.

 

Around goes this world

Without giving a fright

Season after season

All harvest less blight.

Our Lord of movement

From heaven above

This is indeed
Our sunfire love.

 

My love is as true

Red hot, indeed white

When she gracefully appears

In her splendour and might.

Oh joy, oh truth

And peace like a dove

T'is beauty indeed

This sunfire love.

 

The sun, the sun

How you guessed right

She warms the cold

And awakens the sight.

I love like a mistress

It fits like a glove,

There's nothing quite like

My sunfire love.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Whoah, this is solemn.....and profound. There's musicality that flows really well. If I may, however, I have a couple of small notes on some things that don't seem to fit well into their respective stanzas (but in one particular case it does in the poem as a whole). "Around goes this world" would be better off as "the world" ("this" is, pardon my word choice, trying too hard to be fancy, and it's not really echoing anything, so the poem would be better with a simple "the"). "All harvest less bright". Is "harvest" supposed to be a noun here or a verb?....either way sounds a bit awkward unless, if it is a noun, it be pluralized.
"I love like a mistress"....this line is a great line, I'm not going to lie, but it doesn't quite fit with the rest of the stanza that it leads. For if taken into perspective, the first four lines of the last stanza form one thought, and "I love like a mistress" begins the following thought. Because the second line of that second thought begins with an ambiguous "it" which we could take for "my sunfire love", for such a line to follow "I love like a mistress" is weird. Doesn't quite make that much sense. Other than that, absolutely well done!