"Black Banana"

"Black Banana"

A Poem by Steven

If we were two flies
I would outlive you
no matter the difficulty
so that I could eat you first

your stiff black
garbage bag body
filled with pearl white acumen
making me shiver

I would place a straw
right through your
brittle eye-basket
clown-smile and suck

but for now
I will go on eating small beings
that feast on the s**t of others
while stroking my hind legs lovingly






© 2013 Steven



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you should get this poem tattooed on your gigantic balls
that would probly hurt really bad, though

I love how you do s**t like juxtapose
'garbage bag body'
&
'filled with pearl white acumen'
it's disgusting how you fuse the disgusting
with elegant poetic language
I'm glad the lithium is working and I feel up to reading and reviewing
cause I missed reading nasty geniuses such as yourself
this s**t is rotten to the core
but I mean, green bananas, they taste creepy
too solid to be called passable texture, etc.
and the stomach ache hurts more than blue balls for christ's sake
I'm sure we've all been angry enough at someone to write a poem like this
and most of us were quite impotent in our angry expression compared to you
and for making me feel so inept, I applaud you
"if you don't write a book I'll elbow drop you in a lucid dream"
I prepped that for future quotational permission purposes

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Steven

4 Years Ago

Now THAT"S a quote to get tattooed on one's balls ;). Thanks for that, homie.
Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander

4 Years Ago

you're probly the only person I could make a review like that for, haha



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i dig it. and i really like that second stanza. it kicks a*s. have you published a book yet? i'd buy it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Steven

4 Years Ago

Pauly! What's going on my friend? Not yet, but not really trying either. Thanks for that dude.
Paul Grimsley

4 Years Ago

If you need any advice or help let me know. i am pretty proficient with lulu.
Steven

4 Years Ago

Sweet, thanks. I'll probably take you up on that.
I'm not really sure how to review this, lol, it's not pretty is it, but it is f-ing brilliant, and in a way it is fascinating in the way you want to recoil from it but your mind is too busy thinking wtf that's brilliant so you can't stop reading it though your face is all scrunched up with the ewww expression, now that's poetry.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Steven

4 Years Ago

lol.. well thanks
as Jacob mentioned, this is incredible metaphor use.

Beauty, when we extend the extremes of our circumstances is what, in poetry, we call delight;
that quantity of agrigate qualities. This is a love poem from the moment of extraversion,
right after "if we were". And this ending is oposteriori, derived by reasoning from observed fly-facts.

well done sir.
Never forget that it was you who taught me endings......dana

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Steven

4 Years Ago

Always magnanimous.. ;). Thanks dana
incredible metaphor used here...right now i have to be content to be not with the one i love...but love the ones i'm with...until you become available...i may have to outlive all the others who are drawing your attention..

i like "feast on the s**t of others"

it's slangy, it's rough...but it's the reality....it's like a poem getting naked...saying...no frills...here it is, like it is.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Steven

4 Years Ago

Right on. Thanks for that, Jacob.

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