lilith

lilith

A Poem by quinfinn
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proving you can't always trust

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w***e of babylon, seducer of man
beguiling with your web of lies
bride of satan, destroyer of love
i journeyed with you to the bridge of sighs

purveyor of evil, messenger of fate
no man can endure your cruel, black heart
b***h of the underworld, queen of the damned
i gave you my soul and you ripped it apart

temptress of ages, tormentor of fools
deception is your killing blow
betrayer of innocence, angel of falsehood
i payed the ultimate for loving you so

mistress of mayhem, bringer of woe
man's servitude is your eternal bliss
goddess of darkness, princess of perversion
brought about my damnation with a poisonous kiss

© 2011 quinfinn



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Aha! It's all your fault. (I was wondering what inspired BR to want to anally violate Lilith) :-D I'm sensing a bit of rage in this piece...just a touch. Maybe be a little less ambiguous with your feelings in future, give us a shot at figuring out what the emotional inspiration was for a piece? Thanks ;-)

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

quinfinn

4 Years Ago

go back to my much older postings, kimmer, much less ambiguous. thanks for reading me
KAOlmsted

4 Years Ago

I really should have a different color font for sarcasm ;-) My pleasure, quin.
quinfinn

4 Years Ago

sometimes i am rather thick, it is my current emotional state



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Well done. Reading it I was thinking of the litanys I have recited at mass so many times over the years. There was also a call and response feel to this, as if the litany was being recited while soto voce the individual told of his woe.
Very nicely penned.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

quinfinn

4 Years Ago

thank you for reading, steve
Dear Quin,

Lilith is an i l l u s i o n for men. She was meant to be this figure to t e s t the sexual nature of men. However, I feel that she was just a lesbian who did not enjoy penis. According to the parable, Lilith was kicked out of Eden because she would not give herself to A d a m. Therefore, E v e is our Mother rather then the homosexual. Frankly, I love the i l l u s i o n of Lilith because she was assertive about her beliefs.

Under the Microscope

"bride of satan, destroyer of love'

This is a beautiful line, my dear. She is the Bride of Satan because I believe she is just sexually frustrated. Women that have the tendency to enjoy pain commonly are closet bisexuals or lesbians. Keep in mind I am speaking from my unprofessional opinion.

"b***h of the underworld, queen of the damned"

She reminds me of Persephone.

"betrayer of innocence, angel of falsehood"

this part touched my heart actually.
i get frustrated with people who worship Lilith.
she is meant to be an i l l u s i o n.
if anything, she would only welcome w o m e n.

"i payed the ultimate for loving you so"

awe :( *hugs

"goddess of darkness, princess of perversion"

you are correct. she is a "princess of perversion." she is not a goddess.

"brought about my damnation with a poisonous kiss"

you are not a damned.

CONCLUSION

this was a beautiful poem, quin. i am happy you featured this again. i feel comfortable posting my poem about her now.

yours truly,
veronica

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

quinfinn

4 Years Ago

i am grateful for your reading and analogy of this moderately popular piece of lore....i have been a.. read more
Vria P Crow

4 Years Ago

HAHA me thinks that elena has you under her Cherokee spell. You are very lucky, kind Sir! Your ver.. read more
Its All About Eve or someone very similar, one bite of that apple and you are done for, great quality all the way through.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

quinfinn

4 Years Ago

treacherous
OMG - I absolutely love this! Usually a stanza will reach out to be but this whole poem did that for me. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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quinfinn

4 Years Ago

read and review very much appreciated, Tarry
Tarry Franck

4 Years Ago

My pleasure as always :)
"purveyor of evil, messenger of fate
no man can endure your cruel, black heart
b***h of the underworld, queen of the damned
i gave you my soul and you ripped it apart"

Incredibly powerful write.. She does NOT sound like a pleasant person.. Great job with this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

quinfinn

4 Years Ago

she is not a nice person...thank you very much
Amandaaa Caroline (:

4 Years Ago

No problem.
Aha! It's all your fault. (I was wondering what inspired BR to want to anally violate Lilith) :-D I'm sensing a bit of rage in this piece...just a touch. Maybe be a little less ambiguous with your feelings in future, give us a shot at figuring out what the emotional inspiration was for a piece? Thanks ;-)

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

quinfinn

4 Years Ago

go back to my much older postings, kimmer, much less ambiguous. thanks for reading me
KAOlmsted

4 Years Ago

I really should have a different color font for sarcasm ;-) My pleasure, quin.
quinfinn

4 Years Ago

sometimes i am rather thick, it is my current emotional state
Wow this is one angry poem! I feel disturbed just reading it... like hating this woman disturbed! Definitely expressing some dark feeling here Quinn!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

quinfinn

4 Years Ago

oh, you woulda liked her, a real charmer...thanks for reviewing!
valo

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

quinfinn

4 Years Ago

thank you
Again Quin, please remind me to never piss you off! ;) You do venom well! I can almost feel and taste the hatred dripping from this one.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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quinfinn

4 Years Ago

oh that? just some tough love is all!
Surely a vixen who brought heaps of woe with her wiles....one to steer clear of FOREVER! - a mistress of mayhem, man's servitude is your eternal bliss - Bad to the bone!
You have certainly captured the vile ways of this evil woman!!
Excellent write!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

quinfinn

4 Years Ago

thank you Sheila

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i am Quin.i love poetry..don't request me to read your books, not interested. i encourage youthful writers to expand on their skills, embrace their gift, i don't tolerate big egos and hard critics, ca.. more..

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