Darkside

Unfinished lyrics to a tune I'm working on. Care to offer a critique, sudgestions or any impressions that may help me finish it?

Society plants its seeds,
underneath your children's skin,
harvesting your youth,
enticing the destroying from within.
Shun your darker halves.
A good place for demons to begin.
May you dance in the darkness,
with your reveries of "sin"
The light at the end of the tunnel...
Refracted through a distorted prism
The Tower of Babel, babbles on.
Turning syntax into a prison

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[heido]

I like the Tower of Babel reference.. this wouldn't happen to be for a metal song would it? It's quite grim.. hehe