Me

Kylie Smiley :)

 

Me

I’m the kind of girl that laughs

When everyone else is dead silence

You will see me in the back of the crowd

I’m never the center of attention

Simply because I don’t want to be

I dance when no one is looking

I sing in the shower

I make people laugh

And I am very silly

I’m the girl that looks at you with the stare

Giving the guys “I’m not easy” look

I’ll knock you out if you hurt one of my own

I find a way to help anyone I can

You can take it or leave it

I’m your supergirl

I don’t cry in front of people

Because they don’t deserve to see my tears

I’ll stand up to anyone that I think is wrong

I was the girl in school where I sat in the back

But I would pop up and say something out of no where

I’m the one that went up to the nerds

And proved they aren’t bad people

Some of them became my best friends at the time

I’ll give advise to younger kids;

Don’t do drugs,

Have sex when your ready,

And stay in school

I make mistakes everyday

Well that’s because I’m human

And I will admit when I am wrong

I get hurt, dragged to the ground, and beaten

But not even that can stop me

Simply because I am me.

Reviews

[Cole Spire]

Supergirl! I like that.

This was great, i love the way you sum up your whole personality and it makes me want to just hug you. You seem like a great person and this poem makes you seem even better. You have a small undertone of "Don't change who you are" but i think this was more about you. The real you, and this is a you that makes me want to be me.

definitly one of your best!

cole-

[Nish Nish the Fish]

I think you should retitle this as "Super Girl" nicely done! :)

[Twilight]

Clearly, this is an honest and detailed summary of who the witer is. Not just her personality, mind. It also points out, some of her beliefs and goals in life. For example, this is a young woman who wants to stay in school, avoid drugs and early sex.

I also got the impression of a young woman who is proud, and prefers to keep her sad moments, away from the prying eyes of others.

On the negative side, some of the details, did not really need to be included? Or, perhaps I have simply not understood their purpose? Also, the writer has not differentiated between the importance of different qualities? In other words, how is the reader to know, which of the writer's personal attributes or beliefs, are more important to her than others? Using seperate verses, might have made that easier?

Overall, this was interesting to read. Thankyou for sharing this with us, "QuitePoet"!

[Kate Chaia]

I really enjoyed your poem! It reminds me of me.

Very nice poem!

[17thWhitePrince]

WoW !!!
What a poem indeed !!!
WoW !!!

"I'm the kind of girl that laughs
When everyone else is dead silence
You will see me in the back of the crowd
I'm never the center of attention
Simply because I don't want to be"

Very very nice !!!

"I'm the girl that looks at you with the stare
Giving the guys 'I'm not easy' look
I'll knock you out if you hurt one of my own"

Hooray for you !!!

"I'm your supergirl
I don't cry in front of people
Because they don't deserve to see my tears
I'll stand up to anyone that I think is wrong
I was the girl in school where I sat in the back
But I would pop up and say something out of no where
I'm the one that went up to the nerds
And proved they aren't bad people"

You Go Girl !!!

"I make mistakes everyday
Well that's because I'm human
And I will admit when I am wrong
I get hurt, dragged to the ground, and beaten
But not even that can stop me
Simply because I am me."

WoW !!!
What a most amazing piece of writing !!!
WoW !!!
Just beautiful !!!

[Daniel_Puyda_2704]

Very cute and fun.
But I'm still not letting you live this down. ^_^
Sorry, but you can be difficult. :P

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is a very personal piece of writing but you have written it very well..
Simply flawless!

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

And being "you" is a beautiful thing! I love the unveiling in this piece. Good write!

[Sound]

Good job. I must say this poem was brutally honest. I found a couple of typo--I think?

When everyone else is dead silence (Silent, maybe?)

I was the girl in school where I sat in the back (That sat in the back, maybe?)

Just a few tips to make it flow better without the reader having to stop and think: Gosh, I wonder if she meant...

Anyway, good poem. Seems a little contradictory at times, though, in my opinion of course. Like you're the quiet one, but at the same time your not quiet at all. Quite the opposite. And lose the "Nerd" term. It doesn't sound like your the good person at all for going up to the "Nerd's" if you're still calling them "Nerds". Even if they turned out to "not be so bad after all". haha. Just some tips, of course.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

An honest account of who you are. Very down to earth and good advise for the younger set. Great poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[scorpion-red]

i love this poem i it is so go with the flow