Sonnet Two- Longing

Another sonnet I wrote as an idea from myEnglish teacher with my boyfriend as inspiration.

How I long to see your face,
An instant anti-depressant
Those light blue eyes like the sky
That soft dark brown hair.
I miss it- I miss you.
The need to see you burning inside me
Like a fire burning on accelerant
The flame can only be extinguished
With the sight of you,
But when the flame is doused
It’s never for long
The fire comes back with vengeance
I miss you again.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[poetic-raven2012]

BeccaBeccaBecca i likes. Butbut, I kinda just wanna go BLAM! punctuation. Uhuh-uhuh, tu necesitas punctuacion. And I love the anti-depressant line, and the whole flame image you pull to mind in the second half. Lovesya:]

[Kaitlin]

aw Becca, i love this so much.
I like how you compared your desire to see him to a flame. Its the perfect metaphor. Everything in the poem flows so well. I'm sure Policastro would be proud lol :)

[Cassandra D.]

I thought it was very nice, to tell you the truth.
Very well written; you expressed the words of love very well.