Breath

Breath

A Poem by Light




Breath~

Heaven shudders 
dim noises of wonders 
they gleam
 Finding their paths through ether 
occult splendour 
Reflected in my longing heart

I can hear the Nature's voices
moaning through ardent realm
Awaiting the rebirth 
the labour of new Creator
and I can feel His first sighs 
whispering, commanding 
each of my senses 
"Come fill my well of thirst" 
~~~
It's the rapturous Majesty 
The loving of universe 
Through You 
It's the glorious divinity 
of an adoring Deity
Drifting me through
It's simply
Your Soul's breath
Breathtaking~ 
My entity.


© GH~*
11.7.2017




© 2017 Light



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' I can feel His first sighs ~ whispering, commanding
each of my senses ~ '

Such a personal piece of writing, a display of faith melded with a need to progress further. You use fine language, create tableaux that fill the mind as well as the eyes.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Light

2 Months Ago

I like the way Your words spoke of my poem, thank You my friend for Your sweet words and the nice vi.. read more



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It is interesting the poet chose "Breath" as the title for this work, for the root of the word breath is the same as that for spirit, and this is definitely a spiritual piece. In fact, the first two verses seem to describe the birth of spirit in the human consciousness. The "new Creator" is that high level of being who is calling the senses to "Come fill my well of thirst." The last verse gives the impression that this mystical birth is being achieved through interaction with another. This may be an indication that we are talking about a supreme human experience as well as a spiritual one. Either way, the poet gets her point across with powerful imagery. Well done.

PS: I am have some difficulty with the phrase "Drifting me through" in the last verse. I keep thinking it should be "Drifting through me." Perhaps I should think of it in terms of spirit propelling the speaker rather than penetrating her.

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Light

3 Months Ago

Like always something new in Your reviews dear John, thank You so much for such a thoughtful words, .. read more
The breath is taken by your skills.
Welcome

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Light

3 Months Ago

Awa! Thank You, short but completely affective!

Thank You for the welcoming*
I've been seeing you online for a while now, and have been eager to read your works. Because of the eloquence of your reviews, I assumed you were a skilled writer ... based on this, I was right.
This poem is marvelous in both its visual presentation and in the imaginative, ethereal quality of its words. I like how you describe love with a strong spiritual essence. I also enjoyed the resonance of the last few lines in how they reflect the title and theme. Overall, an amazing work, GH. Looking forward to reading more ...

- William Liston

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Light

3 Months Ago

Hello William :)

I remember You are the first one I first reviewed here and the only .. read more
William Liston

3 Months Ago

No problem. And yes, I do remember your review. I also remember wanting to reciprocate ... glad I go.. read more
Wow, my entire entity, an adoring deity of divinity, simply... Occult splendour... Gorgeous imagery and lilting rhymes here, friend... Beautifully penned...

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Light

3 Months Ago

That's very kind of You, Your words are beautiful and I like that You found the rhymes are lilting, .. read more
Silente

3 Months Ago

They are your words, heh, but yes... They are beautiful, and I did... You are most welcome, and my p.. read more
There are so many grand lines in this piece. It is sensual and loving in a cosmic way.

Takes you on a journey through the universe and creation. It's beautiful!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Light

3 Months Ago

Thank You my dear for a thoughtful and wonderful review on my humble poem, You have a very nice name.. read more
Poetic Beauty

3 Months Ago

Yes it was done with beautiful words that conveyed your thoughts
Oh Sis you are going to be so popular here I can't believe how beautiful this poem is and the way it just flows all through me like an invisible kiss of tender love and that title oh goodness what a wonderful feeling it brings to a gal's heart, I love this first one of your poems -- thank you! :)

HUGGS!
Sammi

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Light

3 Months Ago

How dear You are to me and my humble poem, Sammi sweet :)

Thank You with grateful wa.. read more
Sammi

3 Months Ago

Oh I think I could all in love with you Light you are such an angel -- thank you! :)

.. read more
Hello, GH, and welcome to the Café! 🌻
I like your lovely pen-name, Light, and your beautifully glowing, white butterfly … considering this wondrously spiritual poem and About Me greeting, they are a perfect fit.
I'll bet your expertise is in the deeply expressive Free Verse form, this one shows such developed skill in flow and imagery, not to mention metaphor and emotional power.
Beginning with your choice of picture, to title, and down through every line of breathtaking ink you've spilt, your mind, heart, and spirit touch that of your reader's.

I most warmly and gratefully thank you for sharing your gifts! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Light

3 Months Ago

Hello S.S :)
Yes, I write in Free Verse form, and I'm sorry if it's not so pleasing for some,.. read more
Richard

3 Months Ago

Well, you are certainly welcome, GH … it was my pleasure.
"S.S"?

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